The Pilosus, a player race with 6 Genders for your %th edition Sci Fi setting

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  1. jayoungr
    I'm interested in checking this out, but there doesn't seem to be a document at the link?
  2. dwayne
    sorry forgot to check the box for the file
  3. Quartz
    You need to run that through spelling and grammar checkers. And what is the role-playing point of all those sexes?
  4. dwayne
    Quote Originally Posted by Quartz View Post
    You need to run that through spelling and grammar checkers. And what is the role-playing point of all those sexes?
    Quartz, it is obvious you don't have anything better to do than piss on others works, i would be grateful if you just move on and not respond to any of my posts as your replays are not helpful. And as to the sexes, it is an alien race and part of their reproductive system for that race, and up to the players to decide what they want to role play and in what way its not me as a DM to dictate it to them.
  5. Scott Graves
    Quote Originally Posted by dwayne View Post
    The Pilosus are a very gregarious people who have a very complex society and sexual habits. They can fill all most any role in life but are some of the best diplomats in the galaxy. There is no way to tell one from another as physically as they appearance is universal. Only then going through the Taulpa nichta (loose translation “Sex Dance”) can you really see the difference in the different sexes of their race.
    My, how woke of you.
  6. lowkey13
    So-

    Thank you for writing something and sharing it. That's always a good thing!


    That said, you should proofread it again before finalizing. The first two pages have a fair number of typos, errors, and odd sentence structures that took me out of reading it, and made it more difficult to parse (many of which won't be caught by a spellchecked- in the second sentence, for example, "all most" should be "almost", and the first sentences uses "very" twice).

    In terms of balance, the combination of +2 dex and advantage on dex checks ... that's ... good. Really good. In addition, I am not sure about the fluff (best diplomats) with the underwhelming mechanicals (+1 charisma, no mechanical benefit, and translator boxes do not convey their intentions correctly!!!!).

    I hope this helps!
  7. dwayne
    Quote Originally Posted by lowkey13 View Post
    So-

    Thank you for writing something and sharing it. That's always a good thing!


    That said, you should proofread it again before finalizing. The first two pages have a fair number of typos, errors, and odd sentence structures that took me out of reading it, and made it more difficult to parse (many of which won't be caught by a spellchecked- in the second sentence, for example, "all most" should be "almost", and the first sentences uses "very" twice).

    In terms of balance, the combination of +2 dex and advantage on dex checks ... that's ... good. Really good. In addition, I am not sure about the fluff (best diplomats) with the underwhelming mechanicals (+1 charisma, no mechanical benefit, and translator boxes do not convey their intentions correctly!!!!).

    I hope this helps!
    Thanks man, this is a first draft as i told another i posted to get feed back as to the mechanics not grammar or spelling as i intend to give it another pass or two before a final one is posted with all the other 60 or more player alien races in it. But i see what you mean about the diplomatic part as this like most the others i skip around and work on them a little at a time so may have change my idea for them after writing the history and such so think will look into having the stats reflect this.
  8. dwayne
    Quote Originally Posted by Scott Graves View Post
    My, how woke of you.
    Yeah well theirs are real and a fact of biology.
  9. Umbran
    Quote Originally Posted by Scott Graves View Post
    My, how woke of you.

    It is not clear what you mean by that.

    If you are being snarky, do not continue in that direction, please and thank you.
  10. Scott Graves
    Quote Originally Posted by dwayne View Post
    Yeah well theirs are real and a fact of biology.
    How exactly does that work. Please explain as if you were talking to a young child to keep this PG. Don't want this to turn into soft core after all.
  11. dwayne
    Each on carries part of the total of what is needed to make their life form, like in a recipe each is needed other wise ti will not happen.
  12. Charlaquin
    Quote Originally Posted by Scott Graves View Post
    How exactly does that work. Please explain as if you were talking to a young child to keep this PG. Don't want this to turn into soft core after all.
    There is nothing pornographic about an alien race having more complex sexual dimorphism than humans.
  13. Scott Graves
    Quote Originally Posted by dwayne View Post
    Each on carries part of the total of what is needed to make their life form, like in a recipe each is needed other wise ti will not happen.
    That isn't helpful. The Newcomers in Alien Nation had a cool set up where the male impregnated the female in much the normal way, but only during a certain time of year (They had a cool insult which translates to "you mate out of season") because they are very ritual based. But at one point the male starts to develop a pouch and in yet another real cool ceremony they then transfer the infant from the female to the male pouch in which it resides for the other half of the gestation period. It is a way cool deal and it only takes two genders. So when I ask "how do they do it" I am genuinely curious about the methodology.
  14. Scott Graves
    Quote Originally Posted by dwayne View Post
    Each on carries part of the total of what is needed to make their life form, like in a recipe each is needed other wise ti will not happen.
    I read the description. I have to say I find them to be horrible people as a race for their treatment of the "genderless" variety. They make orcs seem pleasant and friendly. After all orcs treat everyone equally. Equally bad. But equally. Seems to me though that once artificial insemination became an available technology for them it would hit their culture like reliable birth control hit our world.
  15. Scott Graves
    Quote Originally Posted by Quartz View Post
    You need to run that through spelling and grammar checkers. And what is the role-playing point of all those sexes?
    "speak told of a tail passed down"

    I think spellcheck isn't his friend.
  16. tglassy
    This is...an interesting take on what it would mean to have more than two genders. But I think it sort of points out the reason why all animals known to reproduce sexually (with more than one parent, as opposed to asexually, where there is only one parent) only have two genders.

    It’s complicated. It’s overly complicated. If any one of the five genders is not present, no children can be had. What happens if, back in their more primitive days, a natural disaster happens to a village and a third of their population dies, resulting in an entire gender being killed off? The result is the population no longer pro creates, and dies.

    In the same village with only two genders, where the females, being the ones necessary to carry and deliver the next generation, are protected vigorously, and the males, being larger and stronger but ultimately expendable, defend and protect them, you wind up with more women than men (because men do all the dangerous work), and therefore have over 50% being women, and so if that natural disaster comes and kills a third of the population, you have a very, very large chance of many women surviving and at least one man. A single man of any age in a village of women can restart the population in as little as one generation.

    Having more than 2 sexual genders required for procreation almost ensures the species would die out early. Now, you sort of handle that with them having such large litters at a time. But I’d imagine on their home world, they’d have been in a situation where they were more like prey animals or something, with high mortality rates, which would necessitate such high number of offspring. I assume they have these litters often, as their entire society is about getting it on. Without a high mortality rate, your looking at population growth so fast as to be unsustainable. Assuming equal ratio of birth of all five genders, and if they have a litter every year for just five years, then 5 becomes 155 in five years, with 150 of them being under the age of 5 and only 5 parents. Give it 20 years, and if all 150 split into families of 5 and have five litters, then 5 years later there are 930 under the age of five. That’s after only 25 years from one family having offspring. That’s 186 family units. 25 years later, you have an additional 5,580 kids. 25 years later that becomes 33,480 kids. Then 200,880. Then 1,205,280. Then 7,231,680.

    In 200 years, a single family unit goes from 5 people to over 200 Million. Now, if you have a planet full of these things? With millions of families? Each of those families would number 200 Million in 200 years. Even starting with 1,000 families, you reach 200 Billion in 200 years. Humans went from roughly a billion all told 200 years ago to 7 billion now, and most of that in the last fifty years. If these things were at 1 Billion 200 years ago, they would have 100,000,000,000,000,000 members. That’s 1 septendecillion.

    They’re worse than rabbits, and would fill a world in just a few generations if they had no checks in place. Once they reached a technological level where they could defeat whatever it is that used to keep their population in check, they would spread throughout the galaxy like a virus.

    Which, by the way, is the story of the Krogan race in Mass Effect.


    On a side note, one thing I have learned is if something is worth doing it is worth doing right. If you do not want people to focus on the grammar and spelling of something you have put your time and effort into, make sure there are no such issues before you post it for all to see. It is natural to want to show off your work as soon as it is ready, but nobody will see the work through its flaws. I’m not saying this as a put down, I’m saying it as a fellow writer who has gone through this kind of deal before. Never, never, never post a first draft anywhere. Never. Rule of thumb is to only ever post final drafts. Your work should be polished and shining, error free. Let someone else proofread, and don’t get discouraged when they sent it back to you covered in red correction marks. This is how a writer gets better. Sometimes we can’t see the problems with our own works until someone else points them out. This is ok. The good thing about writing mistakes is that a quick edit will fix them.
  17. Charlaquin
    Quote Originally Posted by Scott Graves View Post
    it would hit their culture like reliable birth control hit our world.
    Wh... what does that even mean?
  18. Charlaquin
    Quote Originally Posted by tglassy View Post
    all animals known to reproduce sexually (with more than one parent, as opposed to asexually, where there is only one parent) only have two genders.
    Mmm... This really depends on how you define gender. Modern gender theory, as it pertains to humans, would disagree. Most scholars on the subject nowadays agree that gender is performative, and there are plenty of animals that have more than two sex-related roles that different members of their species perform. Even if we go with the now largely scientifically outdated concept of sex and gender being interchangeable, it is far more complex than the traditional male/female binary, even for humans. Plenty of animals have more than two clear-cut sets of sex characteristics, including humans, and plenty of animals change sex characteristics under certain conditions (humans not included). Granted, there are no species on earth that require more than two parents to produce offspring, but saying that all species on earth that reproduce sexually have only two genders is an oversimplification on multiple levels. The data is clear, gender and sex are both spectra, in humans and other animals alike, so I see no reason the same wouldn’t be true of fantasy races and/or fictional life forms from other planets. Requiring more than two members of the species for reproduction would be an extraordinary biological oddity and would therefore demand extraordinary fictional justification, but the idea of a race with more than two genders is downright pedestrian to anyone with a working knowledge of either gender studies, zoology, or both.
  19. dwayne
    This is a first draft folks if i didn't state that before i am concerned about the mechanics more than anything else. More will be added as to the race and i guess the whole sex and what it is an i will throw in some sayings which most all this is still in my head mind you.
  20. dwayne
    Quote Originally Posted by Scott Graves View Post
    I read the description. I have to say I find them to be horrible people as a race for their treatment of the "genderless" variety. They make orcs seem pleasant and friendly. After all orcs treat everyone equally. Equally bad. But equally. Seems to me though that once artificial insemination became an available technology for them it would hit their culture like reliable birth control hit our world.
    Yes, it was done purposely, and there is a reason behind this which will not be covered in the race description but as part of the setting i am putting together and adventures i have planed.

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