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[sblock]RANK/ARCHETYPE: Fourth Rank Warrior
ORIGIN: Peasant
PASSION: Anger- Anger directed at himself and those who took his family away
REGION: The Jin Empire (Nan)
ATTRIBUTES & SKILLS
(Note: All Skills have +1 die to their rating unless otherwise noted.)
MIGHT [JADE CHI] 5
Athletics 3
Fight 3
Hardiness 3
Lift 4 [Oxes Strengh 5]
SPEED [CRIMSON CHI] 4
Initiative 1
Dodge 1
Finesse 1
Melee 3
Ride 2
PRESENCE [GOLD CHI] 2
Confidence 4
GENIUS [WHITE CHI] 2
Crafting 2
WU WEI [SILVER CHI] 2
Awareness 2
Senses 1
ADVANTAGES
KUNG FU STYLES - Lightfoot 3 (Common Any Chi: Surefoot, Run Like a Deer, Headlong Flying Leap), Eagle Claw 2 (Common Crimson Chi: Quick Rip, Flashing Talons), Cloud Mastery 1 (Common Jade Chi: Phantom of the Clouds), Five Sacred Elements 3 (Uncommon Any Chi: Fire in the Eye, Rooted like the Mountain, Vines in the Woods)
BACKGROUNDS - Weapon Training, Fast, Special Mount, Common Sense, Healthy as an Ox
DISADVANTAGES
Chronically Unlucky
EQUIPMENT - Light Armor, Punch Or Kick, Three-Section Staff
TREASURES - None
Brief Backround
Keito years on a farm and depite his responsibilities as soon as he was able he struck out on his own. He was going to be rich, he was going to find adventure, and women and he name would become known throughout the empire. He failed and after several years on his own he returned to the farm, with nothing more than what he left with. He arrived to find everything changed and everyone gone.
While he was gone his father had become ill, and without an able bodied person to work the land, the entire family fell quicky into debt with a petty lord. When he came to collect he took the last things they owned, their land and their freedom, "allowing" them to work off their debt by putting them to work in a manner only befitting slaves.
Keito has vowed to free his family and recover their land, either by buying them back or by taking them by force[/sblock]