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speaker vs taladas-judgement!
ALSIH2O-
taladas: feeds us a story of a man cursed by his own need for revenge.
taladas has handled 3 of the 4 pictures well in my opinion. i like thr treatment of all but the
fighting men, it seems to be tacked on, even while it is a fulcrum point in the story. he has woven
a tale of tale of redemption, as has his opponent. i enjoyed the main theme of the story even if it
it felt a little rushed.
speaker brings us a story of redemption as well, with a spooky twist
speakers story handles all the ingredients well, and while it is a little long side i did
not realize it until my third reading! i liked the flow, the handling of the pictures and the
moral. this is a strong piece, and in my opinion it is a shame taladas had to face
this stiff competition in the first round. strong all the way around.
i am left proud of both of these contestants, but speaker left me standing on my chair applauding.
speaker gets my vote.
Maldur-
Speaker:
great moral tale! very oriental, and mysterious.
Taladas:
Good start but a very hurried end. It came over as very choatic/throw
together story. Your ideas are nice though. Work some more on them!
winner: Speaker!
ARWINK-
Taladas
Okay, this was just weird Taladas piece caught me off guard, given the tone
of everything I'd read up until this point. Unfortunately, I thought it needed
more room to breath and let all the disparate elements included come together
cohesively. As it stands, it's just too chaotic, swap genres and styles
quickly and without warning. Further, the adage of Show don't Tell comes into
play here as well. The scene that stands out the most is the meeting between
the narrator and Lee Hung because it's given more than a momentary examination
before shifting to the next plot element. Unfortunately, it just doesn't need
this kind of focus as much as other elements of the tale do.
Speaker
I was immediately grabbed by the voice here. It's one of those classic, folk-
tale beginnings that really snaps a reader to attention and sets up a strong
expectation of style. That this strong voice and very definite style carries
on through the story gives it a great deal of strength and pays tribute to
Speaker's ability to imitate folklore. The use of the pictures is stylish, and
the story is well crafted and a very strong voice.
Speakers was the stronger of these two. It came off as more complete that
Taladas' tale, which needed a bit more space and fleshing out to really come
into the ideas presented. Further, Speaker's work echoed the work of Neil
Gaiman's work in the Worlds End story arc of sandman, which is something of a
favorite of mine. I give this round to Speaker.
winner- speaker...with our first unanimous vote
ALSIH2O-
taladas: feeds us a story of a man cursed by his own need for revenge.
taladas has handled 3 of the 4 pictures well in my opinion. i like thr treatment of all but the
fighting men, it seems to be tacked on, even while it is a fulcrum point in the story. he has woven
a tale of tale of redemption, as has his opponent. i enjoyed the main theme of the story even if it
it felt a little rushed.
speaker brings us a story of redemption as well, with a spooky twist
speakers story handles all the ingredients well, and while it is a little long side i did
not realize it until my third reading! i liked the flow, the handling of the pictures and the
moral. this is a strong piece, and in my opinion it is a shame taladas had to face
this stiff competition in the first round. strong all the way around.
i am left proud of both of these contestants, but speaker left me standing on my chair applauding.
speaker gets my vote.
Maldur-
Speaker:
great moral tale! very oriental, and mysterious.
Taladas:
Good start but a very hurried end. It came over as very choatic/throw
together story. Your ideas are nice though. Work some more on them!
winner: Speaker!
ARWINK-
Taladas
Okay, this was just weird Taladas piece caught me off guard, given the tone
of everything I'd read up until this point. Unfortunately, I thought it needed
more room to breath and let all the disparate elements included come together
cohesively. As it stands, it's just too chaotic, swap genres and styles
quickly and without warning. Further, the adage of Show don't Tell comes into
play here as well. The scene that stands out the most is the meeting between
the narrator and Lee Hung because it's given more than a momentary examination
before shifting to the next plot element. Unfortunately, it just doesn't need
this kind of focus as much as other elements of the tale do.
Speaker
I was immediately grabbed by the voice here. It's one of those classic, folk-
tale beginnings that really snaps a reader to attention and sets up a strong
expectation of style. That this strong voice and very definite style carries
on through the story gives it a great deal of strength and pays tribute to
Speaker's ability to imitate folklore. The use of the pictures is stylish, and
the story is well crafted and a very strong voice.
Speakers was the stronger of these two. It came off as more complete that
Taladas' tale, which needed a bit more space and fleshing out to really come
into the ideas presented. Further, Speaker's work echoed the work of Neil
Gaiman's work in the Worlds End story arc of sandman, which is something of a
favorite of mine. I give this round to Speaker.
winner- speaker...with our first unanimous vote