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  1. #171
    maldur-
    Even as its really hard to judge different picturesets against one another.
    My vote goes for NOOC, his story just is the stronger one of the two. Its
    more a single story instead off several parts kitbashed together.

    Winner: Nooneofconsequence.




    alsih2o-

    auroragyps- really liked the use of the spherids pic, but the rest seemed a bit on the bland side treatment-wise. it seemed like oyu were trying to fit a lot of story in a small space.

    nooc- i am liking this oen a lot. from the readings from the snake/child to the magical focus for the crystal, all of this seems to work for me. the lighted hallway maybe could have been used a little more imaginatively, but who notices under this cool little ditty?

    i have to go with nooc

    mirthcard-

    NoOneOfConsequence: This piece was nicely done
    - a very tightly paced story that gives full shrift to
    all of the pictures. We understand the protagonist's
    place in the story immediately as well as her
    relationship to her employer, the mage. The bits of
    flavor text do just that, giving us enough of a taste
    to add depth but not too much so as not to overwhelm
    the whole. I was all set to detract points for using
    the boy and the snake as a throwaway, but in the end
    the prophecy they dispense is shown to be
    self-fulfilling. The only piece that seems a bit
    forced is the crystal, but the mage spends so much
    time trying to explain its somewhat convoluted place
    in the magic that I bought it. Seeing it through the
    female warrior's eyes as so much 'bullhockey' was
    refreshingly funny and helped me suspend that part of
    my disbelief. Not too much to criticize here as this
    was sharp and focused all around.

    Auroragyps: I liked the setting of the Warrens
    and the heroic nature of the boy, Jessen. There was a
    nice feel of children's folktale about the piece that
    gave it a nice rhythm. I was especially impressed with
    the boy's sorrow at having killed the enemy instead of
    simply driving it away. This loss of innocence in the
    face of adversity came across really strongly. I did
    notice that two of the pictures were mislabeled 3 was
    4 and vice-versa, but it didn't bother me enough to
    count against you. Your picture use as a whole could
    have been a bit better, as I will illustrate. Picture
    1 (the nun) was just way too convenient. She's the
    first person that Jessen finds on the surface and she
    knows everything about his enemy and how to defeat it.
    This was way too easy and caused me to roll my eyes
    when I read it. Picture 2 (star) really seemed forced.
    If it had been a picture of a horn instead, then it
    would have been wholly appropriate to the story. As it
    was used however, you could have taken the lattice
    star out completely and the story would not have
    changed, which is not a good use of a picture
    ingredient. Picture 3 (tunnels) is fairly well used as
    illustrative of the Warrens in which the story is set,
    but when the actual picture is described in detail in
    the story it seems very forced (ie. the family went
    right and the boy went left). Finally, Picture 4
    (spherid) was well used as the enemy, although I
    thought the name was a bit silly. In addition, I felt
    the pacing was stilted and choppy with several
    sentences sounding like a court transcript, "Subject A
    went here and did this. Subject B replied with this
    and then went here. Subject A left and went here to
    talk to Subject C..." and on and on. In the end, I
    felt the idea was very strong (and touching even) but
    the execution was rough.

    mirthcard's decision: It's hard to decide
    between stories that have different picture
    ingredients, but in this case I award it to NoOneOfConsequence.

    unanimous decision, nooc goes on to our screwy final....as soon as all 3 winners have checked in we can start it

 

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    I'm around. I'm still not sure I understand how this is supposed to work, but I guess I don't really have to, do I? I get's me pictures and I writes me story.

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    Originally posted by Joshua Dyal
    I'm around. I'm still not sure I understand how this is supposed to work, but I guess I don't really have to, do I? I get's me pictures and I writes me story.
    Don't worry, JD. I think only Clay's mind is dysfunctional enough to understand how this is supposed to work :rolleyes:
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    Well, I'll be the first one to admit I'm no writer. I have tons of cool ideas, but putting them on paper is like pulling teeth for me. The judgements were fair... congrats NOOC.

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    Originally posted by AuroraGyps
    Well, I'll be the first one to admit I'm no writer. I have tons of cool ideas, but putting them on paper is like pulling teeth for me.
    why do you think i just hunt pictures ?

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    Checking in.

  • #177
    Checking in!

    Added: a nod to Auroragyps - tough break being judged against each other with different photos. Mine clicked for me but it isn't always that smooth. Let us meet again on an even playing field and perhaps thou shalt unseat me.
    Last edited by NoOneofConsequence; Tuesday, 17th June, 2003 at 01:58 AM.
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  • #178
    ok, here it is- 5 pictures, all 3 of you write a story or miniadventure and judges will eliminate 1 and we will due it again til 1 remains
    Last edited by alsih2o; Tuesday, 17th June, 2003 at 01:13 AM.

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    joshua dyal, nooc, taladas-

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    joshua dyal, nooc, taladas-

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