GlassEye
Adventurer
I like what you have done but I agree with removing the Sunward section. I'm also not sure it really needs to be replaced with anything. 'Generally local, but some outwardly concerned' (my paraphrase) still has a vague yes-no dichotomy to it. I think I agree with jkason that it would be better if whatever you are trying to get at were stated boldly. How about something like: 'The majority of the Cortesian clergy are concerned solely with overseeing the religious, political, and community life of Venzans and have little interest in those not blessed by being born Venzan. There is a small group, however, who have taken it as their mandate to establish chantries, chapels, and chapterhouses wherever Venzan feet have trod [in direct competition with Cortessan proselytizing].'
Despite having written the above I'm not sure it should be included either. It seems to me that this sort of division is ideal for inclusion in the Cortesia/Cortessa schism, i.e. the non-expansionist Cortesians vs. the expansionistic, proselytize through trade Cortessans. (The end, in brackets, was added after the rest as a possible modification).
A few other random thoughts I've had:
* It seems to me that Tritower, originally established as a colony of Venza would have a larger temple to Cortesia than a shrine with a small staff unless there was some event that indicated otherwise.
* I'd like to see some descriptive iconography included. We have the two faces of Cortesia in pre-schism iconography but I think we should have a more current depiction of the goddess: a woman in flowing robes seated in a throne-like chair holding two babes, longsword propped against one arm of the chair and a hound at her feet.
* Although not previously determined it seems the Metropolitan of Venza, the temples' representative and advisor to the Grand Council, would be a Cortesian.
* I'd like to see an expansion of the saints like Saint Ulthar.
* Typical view of the Cortessans by Cortesian clergy?
