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<blockquote data-quote="Donnaf" data-source="post: 1941880" data-attributes="member: 27415"><p><strong>stuff</strong></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p>Thanks for your warm welcome. I also really appreciate that you are able to take criticism so constructively and not get all defensive. I don't want to seem rude -- I guess I am just a blunt girl. I think I will stay reading your story for now -- ENworld seems overwhelming -- so many stories to read... and yours was the first I clicked on (lucky you!)</p><p></p><p>As for your "camara shift model" -- I really do think that is an excellent way to write -- third person perspective is a great tool for many writers. However, the characters are not the only main focus of many third person perspective stories. Characters must interact with their environment so as for "information dumping" -- I guess I don't agree that telling an exposition is really "information dumping" -- it is just exploring the surroundings of the world as well as exploring the characters and their reaction to the world... I guess I am a girl who likes details, not just thought and action... </p><p></p><p>What I am trying to say is that a good writer must evaluate their audience... are you writing this story just as a summary of what occurred in your RPG? Then, it is all good if you want to ignore the surroundings, because the people reading it will already know. </p><p>Or are you writing this story with the intent of some day possibly publishing it for the entire world (or your select audience) to read? You, in your head, already know what the surroundings look like, but you need to take a step back when you are writing to view what people who don't have a clue will want to know, and will want to read.</p><p>When writing, you must evaluate what your audience wants -- this is why I posted at the end of my prior post that Korin Bahn seems like an egotistical character -- and it is not enjoyable to read about heros with big egos.</p></blockquote><p></p>
[QUOTE="Donnaf, post: 1941880, member: 27415"] [b]stuff[/b] Thanks for your warm welcome. I also really appreciate that you are able to take criticism so constructively and not get all defensive. I don't want to seem rude -- I guess I am just a blunt girl. I think I will stay reading your story for now -- ENworld seems overwhelming -- so many stories to read... and yours was the first I clicked on (lucky you!) As for your "camara shift model" -- I really do think that is an excellent way to write -- third person perspective is a great tool for many writers. However, the characters are not the only main focus of many third person perspective stories. Characters must interact with their environment so as for "information dumping" -- I guess I don't agree that telling an exposition is really "information dumping" -- it is just exploring the surroundings of the world as well as exploring the characters and their reaction to the world... I guess I am a girl who likes details, not just thought and action... What I am trying to say is that a good writer must evaluate their audience... are you writing this story just as a summary of what occurred in your RPG? Then, it is all good if you want to ignore the surroundings, because the people reading it will already know. Or are you writing this story with the intent of some day possibly publishing it for the entire world (or your select audience) to read? You, in your head, already know what the surroundings look like, but you need to take a step back when you are writing to view what people who don't have a clue will want to know, and will want to read. When writing, you must evaluate what your audience wants -- this is why I posted at the end of my prior post that Korin Bahn seems like an egotistical character -- and it is not enjoyable to read about heros with big egos. [/QUOTE]
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