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<blockquote data-quote="Macbeth" data-source="post: 1842996" data-attributes="member: 11259"><p>alsih2o, you are teh awesome.</p><p></p><p>I just finished reading your story, and all I can say is: wow!</p><p></p><p>Since I don't want to be too overly positive, let me give you a few criticisms. First, sometimes it was hard to follow the story. Specifically, at the end, with Jaime in his glider, what exactly was he trying to do? I presume he was trying to kill the Canidate, but it was never really stated.</p><p></p><p>Secondly, There were a few times that slipped a little bit (just alittle) into telling, not showing. It's probably a factor of the time limit, but it seemed like some parts were needlesly glossed over. Having the story drop out of summary and have some scenes to show what was going on would have been nice.</p><p></p><p>But really, those are my only real complaints. And they are both tied to noe issue (that I can't really call a complaint): I wanted more. Great story, I hope you get on to futher rounds, so that I can read more of your work.</p></blockquote><p></p>
[QUOTE="Macbeth, post: 1842996, member: 11259"] alsih2o, you are teh awesome. I just finished reading your story, and all I can say is: wow! Since I don't want to be too overly positive, let me give you a few criticisms. First, sometimes it was hard to follow the story. Specifically, at the end, with Jaime in his glider, what exactly was he trying to do? I presume he was trying to kill the Canidate, but it was never really stated. Secondly, There were a few times that slipped a little bit (just alittle) into telling, not showing. It's probably a factor of the time limit, but it seemed like some parts were needlesly glossed over. Having the story drop out of summary and have some scenes to show what was going on would have been nice. But really, those are my only real complaints. And they are both tied to noe issue (that I can't really call a complaint): I wanted more. Great story, I hope you get on to futher rounds, so that I can read more of your work. [/QUOTE]
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