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Fred Thompson

Xath said:
I like it. A few temporal and grammatical anomolies in the text, but nothing serious. Very cool. Though...so much for having a family member who could be considered "decent."
Hey! Your parents on your mom's side are just fine - typical southern gentry!
 

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Xath said:
I like it. A few temporal and grammatical anomolies in the text, but nothing serious. Very cool. Though...so much for having a family member who could be considered "decent."
It was largely a cut and paste of your own stuff, so I'm sure there are some temporal anomalies therein (what's that old saying about too many cooks in the kitchen? ;) Too many people mucking around with the same stuff is liable to make anything complicated). That being said, I tried to correct some, as well - you had initially stated that Fred's parents were married in 1857, and that she was born less than a year later...in 1859. I fixed the stuff that stood out, and left some of the other non specific stuff ("increasing violence" as a prelude to the "real" Colfax County War) non specific.

Hey! Your parents on your mom's side are just fine - typical southern gentry!
Precisely. Fred has cousins, uncles, and a potential army of half-siblings that might be entirely decent people. And, of course, as far as she's concerned, Jonas is a great Dad. ;)
 



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