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<blockquote data-quote="alsih2o" data-source="post: 940444" data-attributes="member: 4790"><p><strong>joshua dyal vs gregor-</strong></p><p></p><p>maldur- </p><p>Again a similar use of the images, the craftsman as the main character, and</p><p>a not so happy end. But it seems Gregor did create a simpler and more to the</p><p>point story. While Joshua's story was nice, I thought the "window-dressing"</p><p>like the church/preacher and the Carnival were not really necessary, even</p><p>distracting from the real story. So my vote goes to our newbie.</p><p>Winner: Gregor.</p><p></p><p> alsih2o-</p><p> gregor- i really liked this. the pictures were used well( i assumed everyone would make the tiger harmless, like toothless in the old lassie cartoons) and the old man magical, maybe it is just how you broke from my expectaqtions but i fely right at home in oyur story. eamon will show up in my cmapaign at some point <img src="data:image/gif;base64,R0lGODlhAQABAIAAAAAAAP///yH5BAEAAAAALAAAAAABAAEAAAIBRAA7" class="smilie smilie--sprite smilie--sprite1" alt=":)" title="Smile :)" loading="lazy" data-shortname=":)" /></p><p></p><p> josh dyal- wowza what a wacky story! i like how the devil pic was used, and the tiger pic had some real promise.</p><p></p><p> gregor made a better match with the pics to me, but joshuas story was wacky-come-goodly, i have to give it to joshua, with a nod of the head to gregor for having enough sand to step into competition so soon after joining the boards <img src="data:image/gif;base64,R0lGODlhAQABAIAAAAAAAP///yH5BAEAAAAALAAAAAABAAEAAAIBRAA7" class="smilie smilie--sprite smilie--sprite1" alt=":)" title="Smile :)" loading="lazy" data-shortname=":)" /></p><p></p><p>mirthcard-</p><p> <strong>Gregor:</strong> That was a tough set of pictures to</p><p>deal with, I'll give you that. What you managed to do</p><p>with them was quite inventive, if a little bit forced.</p><p>I liked the character and characteristics of Eamon</p><p>that you lay out for us - a gentle old soul who likes</p><p>cornhusk art, farming, raising pigs and beautiful</p><p>sunsets and just happens to live in a cave with a</p><p>full-grown tiger and a demon-child <img src="data:image/gif;base64,R0lGODlhAQABAIAAAAAAAP///yH5BAEAAAAALAAAAAABAAEAAAIBRAA7" class="smilie smilie--sprite smilie--sprite9" alt=":eek:" title="Eek! :eek:" loading="lazy" data-shortname=":eek:" /> It sounds</p><p>like a really messed up personal ad now that I think</p><p>about it. All of the pictures are used well and fit</p><p>the plot of the piece nicely. So where does this entry</p><p>falter? It's a bit too long. That's always a tough</p><p>line to draw, however. Not enough and the judge will</p><p>say it's skimpy, too much and the judge will get</p><p>bored, which I very nearly was, especially given the</p><p>slow, methodical pacing. You worked quite a bit of</p><p>descriptive text into your entry and although it is</p><p>very well done, to me it was overdone. We already have</p><p>the pictures to go by, we don't need to be told every</p><p>detail in the picture over again. But herein lies</p><p>another problem, if you took the descriptive text out,</p><p>you're not left with much of a story. The plot seemed</p><p>a bit threadbare to me, only serving to loosely</p><p>connect the (admittedly difficult) picture ingredients</p><p>together. The piece has its strengths and weaknesses</p><p>and ultimately come out so-so for me.</p><p></p><p><strong>Joshua Dyal:</strong> Nice, nice, nice. I really like</p><p>this JD. The character of Horace comes through so</p><p>strongly in the first part, that you think you've got</p><p>him nailed. But then comes the left turn at Albequerue</p><p>in part two. Suddenly, Horace is LaVey Jr. Who knew? I</p><p>really didn't see that coming. Things just tumble on</p><p>from there. The stranger, the love, the tiger, the</p><p>little demon puff - these are all really nice touches.</p><p>Although your piece is a bit long too, I didn't find</p><p>myself wanting to skip ahead. This entry held my</p><p>attention throughout. I thought the pacing jumped from</p><p>introspection to desperation and back again</p><p>effortlessly. The twist at the end was nice also,</p><p>although I would have liked more exposition of</p><p>Melissa's character before she became an active</p><p>participant. She seemed almost too convenient a</p><p>villain. Your use of picture 3 seemed tacked on as</p><p>well. All in all, I couldn't find much to criticize</p><p>here. Good job. Oh, one more thing, I believe the</p><p>lyrics are: <em>If you don't eat your meat, you can't</em></p><p><em>have any pudding; How can you have any pudding, if you</em></p><p><em>don't eat your meat?</em> To me, they fit even better</p><p>than the ones you posted.</p><p></p><p><strong>mirthcard's decision:</strong> In a blistering show of</p><p>force, <strong>Joshua Dyal</strong> blazes past his opponent.</p><p></p><p> split decision again, joshua dyal moves on to round 2...</p></blockquote><p></p>
[QUOTE="alsih2o, post: 940444, member: 4790"] [b]joshua dyal vs gregor-[/b] maldur- Again a similar use of the images, the craftsman as the main character, and a not so happy end. But it seems Gregor did create a simpler and more to the point story. While Joshua's story was nice, I thought the "window-dressing" like the church/preacher and the Carnival were not really necessary, even distracting from the real story. So my vote goes to our newbie. Winner: Gregor. alsih2o- gregor- i really liked this. the pictures were used well( i assumed everyone would make the tiger harmless, like toothless in the old lassie cartoons) and the old man magical, maybe it is just how you broke from my expectaqtions but i fely right at home in oyur story. eamon will show up in my cmapaign at some point :) josh dyal- wowza what a wacky story! i like how the devil pic was used, and the tiger pic had some real promise. gregor made a better match with the pics to me, but joshuas story was wacky-come-goodly, i have to give it to joshua, with a nod of the head to gregor for having enough sand to step into competition so soon after joining the boards :) mirthcard- [b]Gregor:[/b] That was a tough set of pictures to deal with, I'll give you that. What you managed to do with them was quite inventive, if a little bit forced. I liked the character and characteristics of Eamon that you lay out for us - a gentle old soul who likes cornhusk art, farming, raising pigs and beautiful sunsets and just happens to live in a cave with a full-grown tiger and a demon-child :eek: It sounds like a really messed up personal ad now that I think about it. All of the pictures are used well and fit the plot of the piece nicely. So where does this entry falter? It's a bit too long. That's always a tough line to draw, however. Not enough and the judge will say it's skimpy, too much and the judge will get bored, which I very nearly was, especially given the slow, methodical pacing. You worked quite a bit of descriptive text into your entry and although it is very well done, to me it was overdone. We already have the pictures to go by, we don't need to be told every detail in the picture over again. But herein lies another problem, if you took the descriptive text out, you're not left with much of a story. The plot seemed a bit threadbare to me, only serving to loosely connect the (admittedly difficult) picture ingredients together. The piece has its strengths and weaknesses and ultimately come out so-so for me. [b]Joshua Dyal:[/b] Nice, nice, nice. I really like this JD. The character of Horace comes through so strongly in the first part, that you think you've got him nailed. But then comes the left turn at Albequerue in part two. Suddenly, Horace is LaVey Jr. Who knew? I really didn't see that coming. Things just tumble on from there. The stranger, the love, the tiger, the little demon puff - these are all really nice touches. Although your piece is a bit long too, I didn't find myself wanting to skip ahead. This entry held my attention throughout. I thought the pacing jumped from introspection to desperation and back again effortlessly. The twist at the end was nice also, although I would have liked more exposition of Melissa's character before she became an active participant. She seemed almost too convenient a villain. Your use of picture 3 seemed tacked on as well. All in all, I couldn't find much to criticize here. Good job. Oh, one more thing, I believe the lyrics are: [i]If you don't eat your meat, you can't have any pudding; How can you have any pudding, if you don't eat your meat?[/i] To me, they fit even better than the ones you posted. [b]mirthcard's decision:[/b] In a blistering show of force, [b]Joshua Dyal[/b] blazes past his opponent. split decision again, joshua dyal moves on to round 2... [/QUOTE]
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