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The Blade of Phoee (Updated 12/08/08)
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<blockquote data-quote="Funeris" data-source="post: 2503302" data-attributes="member: 22792"><p><strong>Correspondence</strong></p><p></p><p><strong>CORRESPONDENCE</strong></p><p></p><p>Okay folks, I’m looking for a little feedback. I want to know what you like and what I can improve with my writing style. For those that don’t know, I really want to be a novelist some day. That way I can escape my “real” job and just sit at a computer and write all the time. <img src="data:image/gif;base64,R0lGODlhAQABAIAAAAAAAP///yH5BAEAAAAALAAAAAABAAEAAAIBRAA7" class="smilie smilie--sprite smilie--sprite8" alt=":D" title="Big grin :D" loading="lazy" data-shortname=":D" /></p><p></p><p>So…my questions…</p><p></p><p>1. How’s the dialog going? Does it sound like separate people interacting? Or does it just sound like one person talking to himself?</p><p></p><p>2. Characterization: How’s the characterization going? Do the characters seem real? Do they seem like separate entities? Can you relate with any of them? Do you despise any of them?</p><p></p><p>3. With the above battle scene…did it flow? Did it keep you on the edge of your seat? Should I use shorter sentences? Maybe some corny onomatopoeia? </p><p></p><p>4. If you’re here (and reading) then you must like my style for some reason. Why?</p><p></p><p>5. Am I consistent in my writing (verb tense…character description….etc.)??</p><p></p><p>6. Any other comments you can give would be helpful and appreciated.</p><p></p><p>This SH (and my other SH) are just practice…I’ve been out of the writing game for awhile…dealing with Real Life…and now I’m ready to leap back in…head first…and hopefully not plummet to my demise. Heh.</p><p></p><p>For those of you that give me feedback, <strong>THANKS!</strong> I really appreciate it.</p><p></p><p>And I hope that the sheer amount of updates, was worth the extra wait.</p><p></p><p>~Fune</p></blockquote><p></p>
[QUOTE="Funeris, post: 2503302, member: 22792"] [b]Correspondence[/b] [b]CORRESPONDENCE[/b] Okay folks, I’m looking for a little feedback. I want to know what you like and what I can improve with my writing style. For those that don’t know, I really want to be a novelist some day. That way I can escape my “real” job and just sit at a computer and write all the time. :D So…my questions… 1. How’s the dialog going? Does it sound like separate people interacting? Or does it just sound like one person talking to himself? 2. Characterization: How’s the characterization going? Do the characters seem real? Do they seem like separate entities? Can you relate with any of them? Do you despise any of them? 3. With the above battle scene…did it flow? Did it keep you on the edge of your seat? Should I use shorter sentences? Maybe some corny onomatopoeia? 4. If you’re here (and reading) then you must like my style for some reason. Why? 5. Am I consistent in my writing (verb tense…character description….etc.)?? 6. Any other comments you can give would be helpful and appreciated. This SH (and my other SH) are just practice…I’ve been out of the writing game for awhile…dealing with Real Life…and now I’m ready to leap back in…head first…and hopefully not plummet to my demise. Heh. For those of you that give me feedback, [b]THANKS![/b] I really appreciate it. And I hope that the sheer amount of updates, was worth the extra wait. ~Fune [/QUOTE]
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