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<blockquote data-quote="ClaytonCross" data-source="post: 8078704" data-attributes="member: 6880599"><p>It was suggested that I make this by my GM as a result of a conversation about about spell options and warlock taxes. I love the warlock class design but I feel like it gets in its own way a lot.</p><p>I made this and he reviewed and like it but since it was his suggestion I feel it was made in a bubble, so I wanted to get some out side criticism and suggestions. This is my first attempt so I don't expect positive feed back. I am in fact here for for constructive criticism. In order for criticism to be constructive I am requesting two things. #1 Be clear and specific on your criticism. What do you you not like and why do you not like it? #2 I would like an honest attempt by anyone pointing to a problem to construct a solution. This helps both in getting suggested fixes but also clarifies the problem by seeing what is removed in your answer. I know not everyone reading is going to do that but its helpful. I am not expecting a lot of reviews because I know homebrew is largely avoided but I do appreciate what I get. I suspect I will not fix problems in a one and done manner however, I might cobble together a couple of different replies with my original intent.</p><p></p><p>At any rate Here it is. (I put a link in case the image is not clear. I could not figure out how to put the PDF inline. I hope this is sufficient)</p><p></p><p><a href="https://drive.google.com/file/d/1PPbxEVMI7Yxts60Dg12EN2tdGPrOkGYv/view?usp=sharing" target="_blank">Update 0.6 09-03-20202</a></p></blockquote><p></p>
[QUOTE="ClaytonCross, post: 8078704, member: 6880599"] It was suggested that I make this by my GM as a result of a conversation about about spell options and warlock taxes. I love the warlock class design but I feel like it gets in its own way a lot. I made this and he reviewed and like it but since it was his suggestion I feel it was made in a bubble, so I wanted to get some out side criticism and suggestions. This is my first attempt so I don't expect positive feed back. I am in fact here for for constructive criticism. In order for criticism to be constructive I am requesting two things. #1 Be clear and specific on your criticism. What do you you not like and why do you not like it? #2 I would like an honest attempt by anyone pointing to a problem to construct a solution. This helps both in getting suggested fixes but also clarifies the problem by seeing what is removed in your answer. I know not everyone reading is going to do that but its helpful. I am not expecting a lot of reviews because I know homebrew is largely avoided but I do appreciate what I get. I suspect I will not fix problems in a one and done manner however, I might cobble together a couple of different replies with my original intent. At any rate Here it is. (I put a link in case the image is not clear. I could not figure out how to put the PDF inline. I hope this is sufficient) [URL='https://drive.google.com/file/d/1PPbxEVMI7Yxts60Dg12EN2tdGPrOkGYv/view?usp=sharing']Update 0.6 09-03-20202[/URL] [/QUOTE]
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