Looking for feedback on my game's Kickstarter pitch

[Ashkhar Ben]

"Yep, couldn't agree more. I have all that written and is just a little more rough around the edges than the part I posted here. I will continue to update the text. But I have the team working on the project detailed, the timeline, specs on the book, pledge levels, etc all written. I'm also doing a $1 playtest pledge and a full money back guarantee up to one month after you receive the finished product. "


Can you give us any idea when this is going to be released to Kickstarter? Or is that confidential/unknown?

I'm shooting for June of this year. Waiting on some artwork, editing the video, and refining the pitch.

 

[Dethklok]

Thanks! Look forward to any future comments or insight you can give.

Hmm.... My only further comment is that the game you describe is really not low or middle fantasy. A world having six different playable species with names like "Anduin," or "Krolog," characters such as the inspiring leader that can swing a halberd and launch enemies with telekinesis, and abilities to bend light, influence gravity, or alter magnetism sounds very much like high fantasy or science fantasy.

 

[Ashkhar Ben]

Hmm.... My only further comment is that the game you describe is really not low or middle fantasy. A world having six different playable species with names like "Anduin," or "Krolog," characters such as the inspiring leader that can swing a halberd and launch enemies with telekinesis, and abilities to bend light, influence gravity, or alter magnetism sounds very much like high fantasy or science fantasy.

I suppose you're right. I'm trying to convey that the world doesn't have high-supernatural stuff. No zombies, dragons, vampires, planar traveling, etc. I guess the former things fall into their own respective genre within fantasy though. I might just delete the "low-to-middle" altogether, as I don't want to give the wrong impression.

 

[Dethklok]

Is there a reason you didn't want to explicitly describe it as science fantasy? (I wouldn't expect zombies, dragons, or planar travel in Star Wars, either.)