drawmack vs taladas results!
maldur-
Strangely both contestants interpreted the fire as a revenge thing. But
Taladas made it a cleaner and more to the point story. His use of the
pictures was also more concentrated on the story.
Winner: Taladas
alsih2o-
taladas- pretty darned straitforward. good usage of the pictures, even without stretching them or reading too much into them. and a nice bit about 2 boys in hell
drawmack- again, no real stretch wiht the pictures, it seems both of oyu used these similarly, and i am gonna take that as a bad mark on me
overall,i have to tip the scales towards drawmack, as the stories are essentially so similar but his maintains a more classic fairy tale feel abd he is bold enough to try the "3 tied in stories" method.
mirthcard-
Drawmack: I like the hook of the story and the
way that it plays on our expectations as an audience.
When the kids take the berries from the old man, we
want to scream at them not to do so, because we
already know how this is going to end. The description
of the old man was nice too, especially given his
eventual transformation into alsih2o's picture.
However, even though you made good use of that picture
in that instance, you may have overused it in the end.
In all of the DM competitions (Ceramic, Iron, etc), it
is imperative that you give equal time to each of the
ingredients assigned. All of them should be integral
to the entry and the removal of any ingredient should
cause the entry to fall apart. Unfortunately in your
case, you have really only made good use of one
picture, number 3. The first picture is a throwaway in
the beginning and is never referred to again. Numbers
2 and 4 are tacked on at the end, barely illustrating
the last moments of the story. Number 3, on the other
hand, is responsible for the antagonist, the plot, the
exposition of said plot, the action, the resolution,
and so on. You easily could have given time that you
wasted on centaurs and berry picking (why were those
in the story?) to further develop the impact and
meaning that the other three pictures had for the
story. Also, the ending left me cold - apparently, the
kids could care less that they essentially brought
about the destruction of everything they had known,
everything that they had held dear to their hearts.
Well, except for the dog, I guess.
Taladas: I enjoyed the setup here. Knowing the
warnings, knowing the evil she is dealing with, the
old woman is blinded by hate so much that she, in a
way, becomes more evil than that which she hates and
that which she summons. Yet this great setup seems to
resolve itself too quickly. I'm not a fan of overlong
entries (hear that everyone?), but this one comes to a
screeching halt. And, like Drawmack, your use of the
pictures is uneven. Pictures 1 and 3 are used well,
but 2 and especially 4 are more like throwaways.
Beyond that, the story made me really pity the kids,
which I don't think was intentional. A couple of nice
kids who try to help a lost dog are fed gruel by their
abusive and racist grandmother and then doomed to walk
hell for eternity when said grandmother tries to use
her 'concern' over them to justify her causing
genocide through devil worship. Man that just plain
sucks.
mirthcard's decision: In this tight race, I
give it to
Taladas for the more active plot of
his story and the more balanced use of the
ingredients. However, I think both competitors could
have done better.
looks like taladas in a split decision...