So I drop in quite early in the storyhour, take a small break and when I check in again, Funeris has set such a cracking pace with his updating that it takes me three days reading to catch up!!
Anyway ... Great stuff, Funeris. I really like the bleak world you've created and the tension between the races.
I'm enjoying the writing too. Don't know if all the PC's characters are really coming out yet, but that always takes time. And some the description and action writing has been really vivid ... keep up the good work!
If you don't mind one small criticism (meant entirely constructively), I think in some of the earlier posts you fell into the "exotic language" trap. By this I refer to a tendency among a number of writers on these boards (and even some published fantasy writers) to use unusual vocabulary, in an effort to spice up their writing ... but with the unfortunate consequence that they often use words incorrectly.
There's only one specific example of yours I recall, although I have a feeling there were a few others. In the description of Cassock and Aramil chasing the figure into the woods you refer to them trying to move silently and then describe them as "noisome". Alas "noisome" doesn't mean "noisy" but "foul smelling". Now maybe they were that too, but I didn't get the impression that that's what you were going for.
Anyway, you seem to have avoided this trap more recently, so probably it's something I don't really need to be telling you at all.
Keep up the good work.
