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<blockquote data-quote="Graywolf-ELM" data-source="post: 1996036" data-attributes="member: 16236"><p>I have been enjoying the story itself. You've been quite prolific of late, which is nice.</p><p></p><p>Some comments then both ways.</p><p>- Over time, I have completely forgotten that Babb is a minotaur until it is mentioned specifically. In contrast, the dark elf is mentioned and her heritage brought up on a regular basis, but not in a "grab your torch and pitchforks" kind of way. I get the feeling from the story that Minotaurs are either common, or beneath notice as there is very little reaction in the story to him. My story hour is pretty young, so I don't claim to know it all. Something I try to do is reference race or class periodically to keep the reader in mind of who is actually what. Things such as "The goblin slipped around the corner so quietly he went unnoticed by the Orc." rather than "Rhgl snuck around the corner..." His name has been mentioned recently, so I try to call up his race or class sometimes. Sorry I don't mean to stick on the thought.</p><p></p><p>- The different kinds of magic issue is new to me and kind of interesting. Contact between races can disrupt magic use, which can be used in so many ways. I wonder of the PC's use this to their advantage in the future. It can also make healing difficult without a party of the same racial makeup.</p><p></p><p>- Many of the story hours tend to gloss over the non-combat scenes. Yours does not. I am ok with that, it makes for a longer story, and gives a little more insight into the characters. Too much insight can drag a little at times. It seems that the party is still has work to do on "working together" or they don't mind having disparate goals.</p><p></p><p>- I have enjoyed the way you have written the combat scenes. Good descriptive that doesn't scream rounds of combat in D&D but has a recognizable quality to it.</p><p></p><p>That's enough from me. I hope it is helpful, as with anything like this, it is surely subjective no matter how hard I try to be objective.</p><p>GW</p></blockquote><p></p>
[QUOTE="Graywolf-ELM, post: 1996036, member: 16236"] I have been enjoying the story itself. You've been quite prolific of late, which is nice. Some comments then both ways. - Over time, I have completely forgotten that Babb is a minotaur until it is mentioned specifically. In contrast, the dark elf is mentioned and her heritage brought up on a regular basis, but not in a "grab your torch and pitchforks" kind of way. I get the feeling from the story that Minotaurs are either common, or beneath notice as there is very little reaction in the story to him. My story hour is pretty young, so I don't claim to know it all. Something I try to do is reference race or class periodically to keep the reader in mind of who is actually what. Things such as "The goblin slipped around the corner so quietly he went unnoticed by the Orc." rather than "Rhgl snuck around the corner..." His name has been mentioned recently, so I try to call up his race or class sometimes. Sorry I don't mean to stick on the thought. - The different kinds of magic issue is new to me and kind of interesting. Contact between races can disrupt magic use, which can be used in so many ways. I wonder of the PC's use this to their advantage in the future. It can also make healing difficult without a party of the same racial makeup. - Many of the story hours tend to gloss over the non-combat scenes. Yours does not. I am ok with that, it makes for a longer story, and gives a little more insight into the characters. Too much insight can drag a little at times. It seems that the party is still has work to do on "working together" or they don't mind having disparate goals. - I have enjoyed the way you have written the combat scenes. Good descriptive that doesn't scream rounds of combat in D&D but has a recognizable quality to it. That's enough from me. I hope it is helpful, as with anything like this, it is surely subjective no matter how hard I try to be objective. GW [/QUOTE]
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