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Judgment of Match 1-6: RangerWickett vs. Speaker.
Maldur:
Gods, this is hard. After carefull consideration, involving tealeaves, astrology, tarot readings, and russian roulette (it was that close). I cast my vote for RangerWicket as that is the funniest start of a story yet
Arwink:
Rangerwickett – Random Acts of Kindness
Another really nice opening, finding the balance between conveying information and teasing us with the desire for more information. It raises some interesting questions about the main character, Hamid, but unfortunately not all of these questions seem relevant to the story that follows. What begins as an interesting opening seems to loose focus as we start to delve into Hamid’s story, and there isn’t a strong enough connection between the man as he appears in his tale and the way he is depicted in the introduction with the horse. It reads like the first part of a longer story, rather than something that stands on its own. As a reader, I find myself hungering to see how and where Hamid changes. That we don’t even return to the setting at the beginning of the story, with Hamid and the reporter talking, only strengthens this feeling of wanting more – it leaves the story feeling incomplete and lost in the flashbacks.
The clash of arcane cultures is interesting, but doesn’t really flow fluidly in the story. There’s a lot of unanswered question here, which again contributes to the feeling that we’re only really getting half the story. While the picture use was innovative and interesting, it also tended to be slightly overt – it was noticeable that certain things happened in order to include a picture rather than fitting seamlessly into the story.
Speaker – On the Scales
Speaker gives us an intriguing monologue, and the feel of someone performing rather than telling a story is pervasive throughout this story. The plot is very stripped down and basic, but the style of the story carries it.
My only real complaint is that it rushes through things far to quickly, often glossing over events where I would have preferred to see things approached in a different style. While this story is dense and immediate, it feels more like theatre than fiction – with an actor to give us subtext and emphasis I think it would truly come alive in a way that it doesn’t quite manage here.
Judgment
These are both interesting pieces with very individual strengths, and while Speaker’s is slightly more cohesive in terms of its story the mood and pace of Rangerwickett’s story gives it a little more life than his competitors. My vote for the round goes to Rangerwickett.
Piratecat:
A brief bit of trivia - the turban on the man's head is actually 375 meters long. That's a heck of a turban.
RangerWickett's story delighted me and reminded me why he writes professionally. It started off better than it ended. That's partially because it didn't have closure; we never go back to the framing story of the reporter, and that weakens it more than I would have thought. It also is weakened a bit by some holes in logic and by the fact that despite the framing story it isn't told as if it's recounted. Despite this it's got a fantastic beginning and a very good middle, and it's a good example of storytelling. I suspect that if he hadn't completed it after writing all night it would have been edited to a tighter finish.
Photo use was inventive and fun. The use of the creepers being turned into eyeballs was the best use of a photo, as it established major plot points as it explained a difficult illustration. Tying together the stone head and the turban was nicely done, and the idea of the head under the turban made me laugh. While the ice tunnel usage was unremarkable, the troll prophets at the end of it weren't, so it works decently as an illustration.
Speaker's story reads as a confession, and I'm still not entirely sure if the lack of establishing detail throughout helps or hinders it. I'm tending towards the latter; it's an interesting and effective stylistic choice with some very nice word usage ("The water-tinged shadows danced like demons. We left."), but I find the absence of names and details to be a distraction. I want to know more! I also find that Speaker is suffering from the curse of trying to fit four photos into a relatively short tale. Events occurred only so that they could be illustrated, and that tends to weaken a tale.
Interesting that both competitors put objects under the turban. Photo usage varied; the child hidden under the turban is an interesting twist, but the quickchange of the character from the "eye detectives" in the story left that photo usage less satisfying than it would have been on its own. "Pensive" felt like it was inserted because it had to be there, but the description of the water tunnel was handled very effectively.
Speaker's monologue had me wanting more, but my judgment goes for RangerWickett, with his story that manages to combine humor and action into some very nice imagery.
FINAL JUDGMENT: 3 out of 3 for RangerWickett, who will go on to the second round.