A Story I written- Elder Scrolls IV: Obilivon.- Gray Fox and Theives Guild

[Kranti1992]

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I made this story loosely based on the gray fox and the thieves guild (not it's members but another thieves guild set in another universe). The style of writing is fantasy, mystery and adventure- I think if you guys like the Gray Fox or a Thieves Guild (or just oblivion & fantasy in general) you should read it.

I need a lot of people to try read it and select "like it" if they do, and comment if you wish to.

Here's the link to my story:

http://www.booksie.com/action_and_adventur...y-fox/chapter/1

Thanks guys, hope you enjoy reading it as much as I've enjoyed writing a story based on a game I've loved for years.

Oh and btw, I've only posted two chapters but you can comment here or on the site for me to add more (as I've already written them but waiting for people to ask for more). Thanks again oblivion fans.

I still need to correct some things though, but hope you guys like the story so far. I will posting the third chapter soon.

By the way guys, you can select which chapter you want to read near the top of my story(where it says Chapters: 1 2 etc, just select the chapter number you want.)

Just posted the 3rd chapter.

 

[Kranti1992]

Anyone read it yet?

 

[ProfessorCirno]

What.

 

[Anton85]

Really? "A story I Written" (Sic).

 

[Dannyalcatraz]

First, Welcome to ENWorld!

Second, a bit of free constructive advice in my capacity as an Entertainment lawyer and marketing specialist.

I'm guessing by your profile info and your first post that English is not your primary language. Not only does your thread title include the improper phrase "A story I written", but you also misspelled "oblivion" as "obilivon" and "thieves" as "theives" (errors you didn't really make in your post). In addition, there seems to be some words missing in the phrase "Gray Fox and (???) Theives Guild."

That is going to turn off a lot of would-be readers. Many are going to see that and assume that grammatical and spelling errors will continue to crop up in your story. That may not affect the quality of the story you're trying to tell, but it will affect your readers' enjoyment of it.

My advice is that You really should edit your thread's title, but also carefully re-examine your story fragment's grammar, spelling and syntax. A word processing program will address most of that, but you may also wish to have someone more fluent in English take a look at it.

And do that for each chapter. Don't post ANY of it without a thorough proofreading.

Best of luck!