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<blockquote data-quote="Eboe" data-source="post: 2697623" data-attributes="member: 38287">Here one for all of you to review please and let me know the mistakes you find grammatically. Its not that long and fairly simple &quot;Escape!&quot; Lady Marlee repeated, her voice shaking in fury. &quot;You planned to escape and leave the rest of us to die?&quot; I don't believe such cowardice. Not even of a wizard.&quot;Thered kept firmly hold of Ironbeard's shoulder, pushed him roughly down the corridor toward the stairs.&quot;The dwarf is right, &quot;Lady Marlee,&quot; he said in caustic tones. &quot;We were planning to escape. Something any sensible person would do in this situation, be he wizard or dwarf or knight. As it turns out, we cant. We are stuck here with the rest of you. We will be heading for the hills with the rest of you. Or heading to our deaths, whichever the dragons decide. &quot;Move along Ironbeard! This is no time for your chatter!&quot;&quot;But your magic--&quot; Lady Marlee persisted.Thered rounded on her. &quot;I have no magic!&quot; he said savagely. &quot;I have no more power to fight these monsters than this dawrf! Less perhaps, for his body is whole, whereas mine is broken.&quot;He glared at her period. She glared at him, her face pale and chill. They had reached the stairs that wound through the various levels of the Dysaraa,stairs that had been crowded with people but were now empty. The residents of the Dysaraa had joined the throngs fleeing the dragons, hoping to find shelter in the hills. Thered could see them streaming toward the outer walls. If the dragons attacked now and the reds breathed their flames upon these terrified masses, the slaughter would be horrific.&quot;I assume you have other duties elsewhere, Lady Marlee,&quot; Thered said, turning his back on her. &quot;Do not concern yourself with us.&quot;&quot;Trust me,&quot; she retorted, &quot;I will not!&quot;Shoving past him, she ran down the stairs, her sword clanking at her side, her armor rattling.&quot;Hurry up,&quot; Thered ordered Ironbeard. &quot;We'll lose ourselves in the crowd.&quot;Gathering up the skirts of his robes, Thered ran down the stairs. Ironbeard followed, enjoying the excitement as only a dwarf can. The two exited the building, the last to do so. Just as Thered paused near the entryway to catch his breath and to determine which was the best way to go, one of the red dragons swooped low.</blockquote>

[QUOTE="Eboe, post: 2697623, member: 38287"] Here one for all of you to review please and let me know the mistakes you find grammatically. Its not that long and fairly simple "Escape!" Lady Marlee repeated, her voice shaking in fury. "You planned to escape and leave the rest of us to die?" I don't believe such cowardice. Not even of a wizard." Thered kept firmly hold of Ironbeard's shoulder, pushed him roughly down the corridor toward the stairs. "The dwarf is right, "Lady Marlee," he said in caustic tones. "We were planning to escape. Something any sensible person would do in this situation, be he wizard or dwarf or knight. As it turns out, we cant. We are stuck here with the rest of you. We will be heading for the hills with the rest of you. Or heading to our deaths, whichever the dragons decide. "Move along Ironbeard! This is no time for your chatter!" "But your magic--" Lady Marlee persisted. Thered rounded on her. "I have no magic!" he said savagely. "I have no more power to fight these monsters than this dawrf! Less perhaps, for his body is whole, whereas mine is broken." He glared at her period. She glared at him, her face pale and chill. They had reached the stairs that wound through the various levels of the Dysaraa,stairs that had been crowded with people but were now empty. The residents of the Dysaraa had joined the throngs fleeing the dragons, hoping to find shelter in the hills. Thered could see them streaming toward the outer walls. If the dragons attacked now and the reds breathed their flames upon these terrified masses, the slaughter would be horrific. "I assume you have other duties elsewhere, Lady Marlee," Thered said, turning his back on her. "Do not concern yourself with us." "Trust me," she retorted, "I will not!" Shoving past him, she ran down the stairs, her sword clanking at her side, her armor rattling. "Hurry up," Thered ordered Ironbeard. "We'll lose ourselves in the crowd." Gathering up the skirts of his robes, Thered ran down the stairs. Ironbeard followed, enjoying the excitement as only a dwarf can. The two exited the building, the last to do so. Just as Thered paused near the entryway to catch his breath and to determine which was the best way to go, one of the red dragons swooped low. [/QUOTE]

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