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Message: <blockquote data-quote="Isida Kep'Tukari" data-source="post: 3047659" data-attributes="member: 4441">Here are my comments on all submitted characters:Shayuri with Trebuchet, LN Neuter Warforged Warmage 8 (Race ECS, Class CompArc) - [sblock]I like the idea of him being a creature of some ancient empire, as the Endless Falls have had many over the years.  The Kingdom of Knowledge would have been interested in him purely for the historical value.  His powers look to make him a powerful combatant, and I always thought the warforged warmaged was a natural combination.  <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f642.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":)" title="Smile    :)"  data-smilie="1"data-shortname=":)" />[/sblock]Bront with Ekilu ka Wooli (Ekilu the White), Unknown Alignment male Darfellan Spirit Shamen 6/Storm Lord 2 - [sblock]He has a troubled background, which is pretty interesting.  The idea that his personality can change with the weather (so to speak) is a cool idea.  I like the fact that he is considered both blessed and unlucky, which certainly suits his class choice.  There's a saying I've heard in some books that it is unwise to be favored too much by the gods.  It's almost necessary to have Fee come with him though, she seems to come as a package deal with Ekilu.[/sblock]Erekose13 with Brightstar Vaukriel, Angel of Splendor, CG Male Illumian Unfettered (Clever Blade Saint) 5 / Duskblade 3 [Race RoD, class AE(Tra)/PHB2] - [sblock]I love this character.  He was already on the tentative list the first time I read him.  The background is absolutly fantastic.  I like the idea of seeking redemption, and his skills are very well suited for this campaign.[/sblock]Watus with Kaiee Taraniule (a.k.a., "Swift"), NG Male Raptoran [RW] Domain Wizard (Storm) [UA] 5 / Stormcaster [SW] 3 - [sblock]While the description of Cliffs of Vilanuue is excellent, you've given me almost no background on Swift.  He ended up becoming a wizard because he showed magical aptitude.  All well and good, but he's an 8th level character.  What adventures has he had?  Why did he become a Stormcaster?  You have a framework, but almost nothing to fill it, I'm afraid.  <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f641.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":(" title="Frown    :("  data-smilie="3"data-shortname=":(" />[/sblock]Fenris with Gilead, N Male Wood Elf Half-Satyr Swift Hunter Druid 7 [Race MM/Dragon #313, class UA pg 58] - [sblock]I like his dedication.  This is a guy with a good head on his shoulders, a solid understanding of the world.  His discovery of his bloodline's powers is well-done, and his dedication to restoring balance to the woods is excellent.  My single concern would be why he left he woods?  His background, while excellent, revolve entirely around him protecting that little corner of the world.  I don't know if Taala would have messed with such a good thing.[/sblock]sans with Pfft the Octopus, Unknown Alignment Male Awakened Octopus Transmuter Level Unknown (Class must be non-PHB wizard before can be accepted) - [sblock]The concept of Pfft tickles me to no end.  The idea of the land-dwelling octopus inside his buddy the water elemental is very fun indeed.  I like the beginning of his background, his own dedication before he was even aware of himself, and his friendliness to the people that awakened him.  Unfortunetly, and I know this must have been because you ran out of time, I have no idea how he came to be in Taala's service, nor how he acquired his familiar/friend/planar binding victim.  There's a great start here, but a start is all it is.  If I end up needing an alt, and you've had time to finish him, I'd like to have him though.[/sblock]Wrahn with Rhaveon, CG Male African Elephant Animorph Paladin of Freedom 3 [Race SS, class UA] - [sblock]I have many questions about Rhaveon.  Mostly why a Prince of one culture should swear himself to the service of another, when his stated purpose was travel.  I supposed Taala would have many potential great deeds for him to perform, but I'm a little at a loss on how he got to the Kingdom of Knowledge and what he did when he got there.  There's not a whole lot to work with here, I'm afraid.  <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f641.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":(" title="Frown    :("  data-smilie="3"data-shortname=":(" />[/sblock]Bloodcookie with Chief Kig’nagrodan’szaar III (Szaar), LE Male Kobold Warlock 8 [Race: MM, class: ComArc] - [sblock]Ya know, he reminds a little of Rygel from Farscape.  While most of the other characters are good, Szaar presents an interesting take on Taala's other types of servants.  I like his acquisition of power, and how he needs to learn how to read the fine print.  His sympathies to what some might consider Taala's greatest flaw is a nice touch.[/sblock]Gli'jar with Asa'Adis Twilight Fang, N Male Anthropomorphic snake, constrictor Denying Stance Monk Variant [Race MM/SS, Class UA] - [sblock]I like the legends you've written, they give a nice background.  While the history of Asa'Adis' people is interesting, I still know very little about Asa'Adis.  I know something about his people and philosophy, but I don't know what tasks or trials he has faced.  I don't know why he would work with any "hairless ones," considering what they did to his people.  I would be confused as to why he could ever settle himself in one place or kingdom, given the World Serpent's edict.  I would suggest extending the background a smidge to fill in the blanks in between a great tragendy to all his people and how that affected Asa'Adis' life and character specifically.[/sblock]Random Encounter with Ununisr, LN Male Grey Elf Psion 5 / Mindbender 3 - [sblock]You've seemed to stop in the middle of his background.  As an orphan, he has little heritage, which is understandable.  The concept of an indugent couple paying for their child's every whim in an interesting path to becoming a manipulator, though the fact that the couple was human begs the question of how Ununsir was even past the toddler stage before they died.  However, you stop when he goes off with the beggar to learn how to use his powers.  I don't know if he left the beggar, or killed him, or was sent away.  I don't know how he ended up in Taala's service, how he decided on the path of the mindbender, or any of that.  He's an 8th-level character, he has experience, and I needed that to be detailed before I have the hooks to put him on the isle-ship.[/sblock]D20Dazza with Tempest Wintersquall, N Male Half-Air Elemental Hadozee 'Winged Deck Ape' Spellthief 5 [Race MoP188, SW41, Class CompAdv 13] - [sblock]I love the Slab, Bloodgeyser, and Riddle.  It's a totally original and extremely cool place, and it just found its way into the Endless Falls.  You've given me a solid background (and apparently it's not even half-finished) and a good reason for him to be with Taala (access to the weirds, I would guess, to find his father).[/sblock]Voadam with Maester Rodian Grubwort, Alignment Unknown Male Grippli Erudite 8 [Race ToH, class Dragon 319] - [sblock]Well, you've given me an interesting place, a good plot for the elemental coup, and some of Rodian's recent history.  However... I don't know where he came from, how he got there, how he gained his powers, how he was able to convince Taala that he, a fleshy outsider to his Kingdom, would have the skills to teach his offspring.  You've given me an excellent end to his story... but the first two thirds of the book are missing.  <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f641.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":(" title="Frown    :("  data-smilie="3"data-shortname=":(" />[/sblock]Kelleris with Lupaz, the Hound of Ill Omen, N Male Blink Dog Hexmaster 5 [race MM/Custom, class CW/Custom] - [sblock]I very much like Lupaz.  He's got a great history, a complicated backstory, and has accomplished some excellent deeds in his life.  He has the experience of an 8th level character (something people seem to forget, people often write their backgrounds as if they're just starting out, instead of well into their careers), and the war wounds to show for it.  Well done.[/sblock]James Heard with Moera Sky-Eyes, Knight of Eladril, CG Female Amphibious Ghaele 8 [Savage Species level progression p 172, template Stormwrack p136] - [sblock]You've given me a very interesting history, a rich place to draw NPCs if I need to.  Moera has definite purpose and direction in life, a reason to do what is needed to keep people from being corrupted, she would make a good heart for the crew.[/sblock]bluegodjanus with Alierin, Who Has Kissed the Storm, CN Female Half-Ice Elemental Fey-Touched Swashbuckler 4 [Race MotP/FF, class CW] - [sblock]I like Alierin's background a lot.  She's a quintessential fey, fun-loving and caprcious, going as the winds of life take her.  With her new sense of purpose, she might be ready for the more serious purpose of retaking a kingdom.  I found it particularly funny how she thought of her destiny as the clearly lesser of the two things she got from Chill's Heart.[/sblock]Rystil Arden with Ianissa, daughter of prophecy, CG Female Nereid Beguiler 2 [Race Stormwrack, class PHII] - [sblock]Delightful novella!  <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f609.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=";)" title="Wink    ;)"  data-smilie="2"data-shortname=";)" />  This is a really excellent background.  I can really feel for Nissa, and you've given me a lot of potential hooks to use during the campaign.  Very good job.[/sblock]Voidrazor with Oobobooboo, CN sentient ooze - [sblock]For one reason or another, I find sentient oozes to be the most hilarious characters one can conceive.  I once put an awakened white pudding into a campaign to mess with my characters.  He had a clipped English accent and a very curious manner.  Very very fun for me to NPC, let me assure you.  So when you came up with a sentient ooze that uses something from another one of my favorite supplements (Chaositech), I just knew I would have to let him in, provided you had a good story to go with him.  And you didn't disappoint.  Taala's court jester.  Priceless. <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f600.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":D" title="Big grin    :D"  data-smilie="8"data-shortname=":D" />[/sblock]Mad Hatter with Lex Starwhisper, CN Female Gray Elf Child Ninja 9 [Race UA p, Class ComAdv] - [sblock]I'm intrigued by Lex's story, and I particularly like how she was able to thward an assassination attempt simply by manipulating events.  Her unusual birth and background are fairly well-done, and I like how you integrated the isle-ship into her personal prophecy.  And I like her name.  <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f642.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":)" title="Smile    :)"  data-smilie="1"data-shortname=":)" />[/sblock]unleashed with Perynomen, (CN?) Male Pixie Wilderness Rogue 4 [Race MM pg.236/ Class UA pg.56] - [sblock]Sneaky little bugger, ain't he?  My concerns are that there's little reason for him to suddenly go from being content in the forest to being scortched and frozen in the desert.  Then he is drawn on by the lure of treasure... where did this come from?  He may have been born different, but I wish that had been made more explicit, or an alternate reason had been expounded upon.  The fact that he tricked the shiek is consistant with what background is known, but I'm not sure why he would think his skills would be welcome in the Kingdom of Knowledge.  Taala gave the party the isle-ship for heroics and services rendered, so I was hoping for a brief explaination of how you had aided or worked for Taala in the past.  What you have is only the beginning of your story, and I need a few more chapters to put him in my story.[/sblock]James Heard with Seraff, He Who Serves, Knight of Mysperea, Hero of Harven's Dale, CG Male Elan Psion 8 (Shaper) [Race XPH, class XPH] - [sblock]You've given me a very elaborate and complicated history.  However I felt like I was reading a history book after skipping all the introductory chapters and maps.  I did not know what you were fighting for, or who, or where you were.  Your backstory is well-written, but extremely confusing to someone without prior knowledge.  It feels as if it were written for a different campaign setting, one in which the reader should already have some knowledge.  I also have this picture in my mind as Seraff as a human warrior or soldier.  If I had been asked to guess his class or race, elan shaper would not have even been on the list.  I also don't know why this former soldier would have been working for Taala or how he even would have gotten there, I'm afraid.[/sblock]All righty then.  I've had a hard time choosing characters, believe you me.  I ultimately had to go with people that not only had a good backstory, but had a reason to be in Taala's court, have reasons to be willing to travel, have a reason to work with others, and have a fighting chance of not killing each other.   Also some of these choices were thematic ones, to avoid having people with very similar or related character themes from trying to stand in the same spotlight.  Those that weren't chosen this time around are on my alt list.  <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f642.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":)" title="Smile    :)"  data-smilie="1"data-shortname=":)" />Shayuri with Trebuchet, LN Neuter Warforged Warmage 8Erekose13 with Brightstar Vaukriel, Angel of Splendor, CG Male Illumian Unfettered (Clever Blade Saint) 5 / Duskblade 3D20Dazza with Tempest Wintersquall, N Male Half-Air Elemental Hadozee 'Winged Deck Ape' Spellthief 5Kelleris with Lupaz, the Hound of Ill Omen, N Male Blink Dog Hexmaster 5Rystil Arden with Ianissa, daughter of prophecy, CG Female Nereid Beguiler 2Voidrazor with Oobobooboo, CN sentient oozeFor all those chosen, I have a new <a href="http://www.enworld.org/showthread.php?t=173798" target="_blank">Rogue's Gallery</a> and a new <a href="http://www.enworld.org/showthread.php?t=173799" target="_blank">Out-Of-Character thread</a> for you to post in.  For your character sheets, I need people to use the format provided in the first post.  No exceptions.  All formating, including bolding, must be used.All magic items, particularly those modified or renamed from DMG counterparts, must name their original source.  If you have something called a Purple Heart of the Thunder Shrike, that looks like constantly beating stone heart crawling with electricity, I need to know it's actually a stone of good luck, because I'm not going to guess that.All items with a non-core source (which is going to be a lot, obviously), must have their source named.  All feats, spells, powers, items, and whatnot must have their source page number named explicitly.  For the Complete Series, the abbreviation are as follows:ComAdvComArcComDivComWarBecause CA could mean Complete Arcane or Complete Adventurer, you can see why I do this.Also:Savage Species = SavSpSandstorm = SanStSS could mean either, so again, please use these.  If you're using a source that is normally part of a campaign setting, put the setting abbreviation before the name unless the name of the setting is part of the title:FRCSFR UE = Forgotten Realms Unapproachable EastMaoF = Magic of FaerunMoF = Monsters of FaerunECSE FN = Eberron Five NationsE EH = Eberron Explorer's HandbookMaoE = Magic of Eberron</blockquote>

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