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<blockquote data-quote="FitzTheRuke" data-source="post: 9361071" data-attributes="member: 59816">I've been trying to find time to give it a full once-over with my &quot;Editor's Eye&quot;, but I haven't finished. Here's what I've got for you:Under Vulnerabilities, Resistances, &amp; Immunities (Object Resistances &amp; Immunities) at the end of the paragraph it says &quot;with a rarity or Rare and lower&quot; when it means to say &quot;with a rarity of Rare and lower&quot;.At the end of the same page it says &quot;it can choose actions from the listed provided&quot; when it means to say &quot;... the list provided&quot;.Under Conditions - Possessed it says &quot;You are Incapacitated and loose control of you body&quot; when it means to say &quot;... lose control of your body&quot;.Weakened says &quot;half damage on a failed Saving Throw and a no Damage on a miss&quot; (ditch the 'a').In Kas' 2nd paragraph is says &quot;either by his sword or an outside Powers. Ought to be either &quot;by outside powers&quot; or &quot;an outside power&quot;, whichever you were going for.All nitpicks, of course! This document is awesome. If I have time later, I will try to keep going.</blockquote>

[QUOTE="FitzTheRuke, post: 9361071, member: 59816"] I've been trying to find time to give it a full once-over with my "Editor's Eye", but I haven't finished. Here's what I've got for you: Under Vulnerabilities, Resistances, & Immunities (Object Resistances & Immunities) at the end of the paragraph it says "with a rarity or Rare and lower" when it means to say "with a rarity [B]of[/B] Rare and lower". At the end of the same page it says "it can choose actions from the listed provided" when it means to say "... the [B]list[/B] provided". Under Conditions - Possessed it says "You are Incapacitated and loose control of you body" when it means to say "... [B]lose [/B]control of [B]your[/B] body". Weakened says "half damage on a failed Saving Throw and a no Damage on a miss" (ditch the '[B]a[/B]'). In Kas' 2nd paragraph is says "either by his sword or an outside Powers. Ought to be either "[B]by[/B] outside powers" or "an outside [B]power[/B]", whichever you were going for. All nitpicks, of course! This document is awesome. If I have time later, I will try to keep going. [/QUOTE]

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