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<blockquote data-quote="Klaus" data-source="post: 4290859" data-attributes="member: 607">I have to praise Ari for something entirely unrelated to game mechanics or flavor text: the article structure. Ari's article follows a natural flow of information, with one segment after the other in an easy-to-follow pace. This becomes even more easy to see if compared to the Yeenoghu article unveiled a couple of days ago.The only bit I think could've been done better is the Quest description segment, specially the first one. It begins by talking about &quot;the battle&quot;, but we only know what is &quot;the battle&quot; in the third paragraph or so:&quot;The Plague of Empty Graves (Minor Quest, Suggested Level 4): During the chaos and tumult of the battle, the PCs must ensure that a specific person is safe and alive over the course of the bloody night.&quot;I'd suggest something like &quot;As the dead rise en masse, the PCs must ensure that a specific person is safe and alive over the course of the bloody night.&quot;But really, this is a very minor thing. The article is top notch!</blockquote>

[QUOTE="Klaus, post: 4290859, member: 607"] I have to praise Ari for something entirely unrelated to game mechanics or flavor text: the article structure. Ari's article follows a natural flow of information, with one segment after the other in an easy-to-follow pace. This becomes even more easy to see if compared to the Yeenoghu article unveiled a couple of days ago. The only bit I think could've been done better is the Quest description segment, specially the first one. It begins by talking about "the battle", but we only know what is "the battle" in the third paragraph or so: "[B]The Plague of Empty Graves[/B] (Minor Quest, Suggested Level 4): During the chaos and tumult of the battle, the PCs must ensure that a specific person is safe and alive over the course of the bloody night." I'd suggest something like "As the dead rise en masse, the PCs must ensure that a specific person is safe and alive over the course of the bloody night." But really, this is a very minor thing. The article is top notch! [/QUOTE]

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