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Message: <blockquote data-quote="Truename" data-source="post: 9803663" data-attributes="member: 78255">This is fantastic. A5 sizing makes a lot of sense, too. I particularly like the stats and items in the margins. Just a beautiful layout job overall. (And I like your writing too.)If I may nitpick, area 6 didn't work perfectly for me. The italics at the top of the page are what I'd read to get a sense of the room. The fact that the room is crowded with skeletons seems like a key point, and I might miss that if I'm just skimming. It took me a bit of reading and rereading to grasp that the "madoi warriors" and "crowded" sections were actually referring to the same thing.Here's my attempt at improving it:6. Hall of HeroesA bronze door decorated with a pair of Madoi Warriors, one wielding a kopesh and the other a bow. The heavy door opens to release a rush of air that smells of old leather and dust. The room inside is crowded with skeletal Madoi Warriors who fill the room from side to side.Madoi Warriors. The Madoi are inert, but will awake and attack if touched. Anyone moving into the room must pass a DC 12 DEX check or activate all of them. A full patrol of 10 warriors and 8 archers are present.<s>Crowded.</s>Altar. At the back of the room is a small altar to Sobek, on which rests a golden crocodile statue worth 300gp.</blockquote>