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Message: <blockquote data-quote="TDRandall" data-source="post: 2118426" data-attributes="member: 4808">Oni, automatons AND Hengeyoki?  Oh my!I figured you weren't limiting yourself to a published campaign world or some direct derivative of a published set of rules, but the mix already shown here proves that I'll never know for sure what is "out of bounds" in theses lands.  I'm not complaining, discovery is a significant part of the fun.  (So I guess I'm wanting more details of culture too, or at least a primer of some things - what races ARE there, how many temples/religions?)  Is there a half-oni template out there or did you make that one up yourself?I'm surprised Musashi didn't step up first.  After all, Kitsune just said "warriors".  Even if he later clarified "unarmed" I would think Musashi would want to try (maybe that's exactly what "not lethal" meant and I missed it).  Only after he was on the ground and Kitsune said something slighting (yet now quite dishonorable) would the big gun Takashi face-off.  Still, that's player choices rather than yours.For the battle, how long did it actually last?  It sounds like one attempted attack by Kitsune and one response by Takashi and that was it.  If it was very short, then I think you filled in the details for color very nicely.So that's something good from last story post, now to try to balance it with something to improve.  Let's see ... the paragraph about sharing sake and stories feels like it glossed over a lot.  You missed a perfect opportunity to either fill in the detail of your world or even foreshadow a bit by sharing something from Kitsune's experience.BTW, is this trip supposed to be the musha shugyo for Musashi and/or Fukasu, have they already done that, or is the focus on "fighting styles" intended to mean that only monks realy do this?  Keep using the terms.  It make it feel more alive and unique and outright oriental as a result.  Make sure when you note something that you give enough down in the note itself to refresh the reader exactly what you are noting about.  Then I can feel safe in just reading through and knowing the mystery will be made clear later.  Otherwise I've got to scroll up and down again.  You did it fine in the last couple of posts, but "begin", "great armor", "wooden clogs" and "wooden training sword" on earlier ones had me scratching my head enough to scroll back up to see what exactly the word you used was in the story.Thanks for the update even when you're swamped.  Shows your dedication, either to your craft or to your fans.  If only other SH writers (who will remain nameless to protect the guilty) would take a page from your book!</blockquote>

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