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Message: <blockquote data-quote="tadk" data-source="post: 3089472" data-attributes="member: 32497">thank you for the comments and judgementsGood Day to one and all,thank you for the kind judgements.Funny how everyone reads something and it is totally different than what was going on in my head.Not real specifics here, unless I think of them.Poetry DM, I am better there i think. My lack of strong sense of time and tense does not hinder me so muchPicsGahh had no clue what to do with the last wheelchair pic. I mean I wanted to keep the story to 1 or 2 characters (per other advice I have been given which makes sense) but there are clearly 3 people. I didnt have the time nor energy to develop the 3 of them into the story, it being then a post singularity piece and that is the 3 characters all descendents of Cat a Strophe in some literal or figurative sense as they climb the strings of all reality to look down on past / present / future all at once. I obviously did not make it there.Vic is a re-used version of a NPC Character Hurricane V (V cause that is what my wife called me, hurricance cause it is always a storm around me) who as a NPC in various genres is mostly a hunter of monsters. Cat is the lead singer of a band I made for Shadowrun and also CP2020. So his name is Vic. Simple there.As an NPC a lot of his motivation is the death of his wife at the hands of "monsters" (pertinent to the genre), but that element does not fit since Cat is from a time later than his. So there I am trying to merge these elements and so I tried to stay timeless but that ends up confused tense and costs me points <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f642.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":)" title="Smile    :)"  data-smilie="1"data-shortname=":)" />.That gave me people to work with with already made motives and actions that influenced the story and perhaps not for the best vice brand new characters instead of alterations of what i have had before. I would do a lot better with fewer pics actually, because then there is more leeway for me, to do the writing.To be honest as I was working on the piece I knew it was going to fall short, too much ground too hard to cover what came into my mind so I totally agree with the judgement and want to publicly thank all who read it and commented on it.A last huge element to the story is / was the CD I had recently gotten and was listening to more than once a day. Group called Ludo their Broken Bride CD which had potentially too much influence on the life and death of the characters in the story as well as what in the back of my mind was going on. TK</blockquote>

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