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<blockquote data-quote="BSF" data-source="post: 1643983" data-attributes="member: 13098"><p>Whoa! Judgements posted like 3 1/2 hours ago and I somehow missed it. Yipes!</p><p></p><p>First off, thank you for the story Francisca! Werewolves are fun and I think Agent Keady encountering one makes for a good story idea. </p><p></p><p>For the judges: Wow, thanks for the kind words on the story. </p><p></p><p>I am very pleased that you enjoyed the dual use for the angel picture. I decided I was taking a chance on that one, since it would be unusual to have an illustration used twice for a story, but it felt right. </p><p></p><p>I was expecting to get nailed for a few things and I am oddly pleased that I did. I say pleased because I know my writing skills need polish and I enjoy the feedback. </p><p></p><p>Barsoomcore - I have been thinking that I really need to take a brush-up course on grammar. While I always loved reading, I despised grammar classes in school. Looking back on it, and contrasting my scholastic experiences with people I know, I did not have the most dynamic teachers. It's really not a good excuse, and it is one that I think I need to correct. Any advice on good books providing a strong overview of grammar would be appreciated. <img src="data:image/gif;base64,R0lGODlhAQABAIAAAAAAAP///yH5BAEAAAAALAAAAAABAAEAAAIBRAA7" class="smilie smilie--sprite smilie--sprite1" alt=":)" title="Smile :)" loading="lazy" data-shortname=":)" /></p><p></p><p>I do suffer from verbosity. I even cut stuff out of the story and it still had too much verbosity. Tighten my stories and improve my grammar is the message I am hearing. </p><p></p><p>Mythago - What can I say? Doh! *bangs head on desk* You are, of course, correct. It would be an easy thing for a demon with Lou's talents to find some way for Darren to be free. What a plot hole! I actually knew that I would have a little more difficulty with some of the details with you in the "audience", but I chose to take the risk. This was the third story my muse tried to feed me and I was running out of time. The other two didn't have anywhere to go. </p><p></p><p>Darren's style is a bit jumbled. I had difficulty finding his voice and his style as I was writing. I need to make a decision on his style, or better explain why it is erratic. </p><p></p><p>I am very pleased that you all thought the story stood on it's own. The story my muse handed me, as a final option, was really just a prelude to another story I have written. (<a href="http://www.enworld.org/forums/showpost.php?p=1514648" target="_blank">Rainmaker</a>) I wanted people who have read both stories to see some of the potential links, but I needed this one to stand alone if you hadn't read the other. </p><p></p><p>Thank you for the feedback! If anyone else has any desire to throw their thoughts out there, I would certainly welcome them! Either in this thread, or in the <a href="http://www.enworld.org/forums/showthread.php?t=92209" target="_blank">Judge Free Commentary thread</a>. Though, since my story has been judged, you do not need to worry about biasing judgements, so this thread is fine.</p></blockquote><p></p>
[QUOTE="BSF, post: 1643983, member: 13098"] Whoa! Judgements posted like 3 1/2 hours ago and I somehow missed it. Yipes! First off, thank you for the story Francisca! Werewolves are fun and I think Agent Keady encountering one makes for a good story idea. For the judges: Wow, thanks for the kind words on the story. I am very pleased that you enjoyed the dual use for the angel picture. I decided I was taking a chance on that one, since it would be unusual to have an illustration used twice for a story, but it felt right. I was expecting to get nailed for a few things and I am oddly pleased that I did. I say pleased because I know my writing skills need polish and I enjoy the feedback. Barsoomcore - I have been thinking that I really need to take a brush-up course on grammar. While I always loved reading, I despised grammar classes in school. Looking back on it, and contrasting my scholastic experiences with people I know, I did not have the most dynamic teachers. It's really not a good excuse, and it is one that I think I need to correct. Any advice on good books providing a strong overview of grammar would be appreciated. :) I do suffer from verbosity. I even cut stuff out of the story and it still had too much verbosity. Tighten my stories and improve my grammar is the message I am hearing. Mythago - What can I say? Doh! *bangs head on desk* You are, of course, correct. It would be an easy thing for a demon with Lou's talents to find some way for Darren to be free. What a plot hole! I actually knew that I would have a little more difficulty with some of the details with you in the "audience", but I chose to take the risk. This was the third story my muse tried to feed me and I was running out of time. The other two didn't have anywhere to go. Darren's style is a bit jumbled. I had difficulty finding his voice and his style as I was writing. I need to make a decision on his style, or better explain why it is erratic. I am very pleased that you all thought the story stood on it's own. The story my muse handed me, as a final option, was really just a prelude to another story I have written. ([url=http://www.enworld.org/forums/showpost.php?p=1514648]Rainmaker[/url]) I wanted people who have read both stories to see some of the potential links, but I needed this one to stand alone if you hadn't read the other. Thank you for the feedback! If anyone else has any desire to throw their thoughts out there, I would certainly welcome them! Either in this thread, or in the [url=http://www.enworld.org/forums/showthread.php?t=92209]Judge Free Commentary thread[/url]. Though, since my story has been judged, you do not need to worry about biasing judgements, so this thread is fine. [/QUOTE]
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