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Message: <blockquote data-quote="Berandor" data-source="post: 2513170" data-attributes="member: 225">Damn.[sblock]Whooohoo! <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f600.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":D" title="Big grin    :D"  data-smilie="8"data-shortname=":D" />Thank you to the judges, all of them, for their volunteering. And my hat's off to mythago, who seemingly effortlessly conjures worlds and universes from her pen, in a way that would leave me behind even if mine wasn't broken. I got lucky, is all.BSF is right that I should have tightened the main character some more, especially with the similes. However, more stuff about Gwen was there before I cut 900 words <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f609.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=";)" title="Wink    ;)"  data-smilie="2"data-shortname=";)" /> 4,000 just left me with the basic plot. And Gunther was, to me at least, always just a dumb animal and never more intelligent than your run of the mill armAdillo. Perhaps that was a mistake, though.It's not exactly a cathartic story, is it? Now you know how much I like my job.I already echoed Rodrigo's comments in my own. World-building is surely one of my weaknesses in writing. I'll try to do better next time <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f642.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":)" title="Smile    :)"  data-smilie="1"data-shortname=":)" />But really, my mind is boggled. I think I'm gonna stop now and just sit here, grinning sheepishly.[/sblock]</blockquote>

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