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<blockquote data-quote="steeldragons" data-source="post: 5891901" data-attributes="member: 92511"><p><span style="font-size: 10px"><span style="font-size: 12px">Round II: Match 2</span></span></p><p><span style="font-size: 10px"><span style="font-size: 12px"></span></span></p><p><span style="font-size: 10px">Rodrigo Instalindir’s <em>Revenge is a Dish Best Served Sticky</em></span></p><p><span style="font-size: 10px">vs.</span></p><p><span style="font-size: 10px">Daeja’s <em>Untitled...(I'll refer to this as "Jack" for simplicity's sake)</em></span></p><p><span style="font-size: 10px">vs.</span></p><p><span style="font-size: 10px">SteelDraco’s <em>Shards out of Bond</em></span></p><p><span style="font-size: 10px"></span></p><p><span style="font-size: 10px">Let's to it...shall we?</span></p><p><span style="font-size: 10px"></span></p><p><span style="font-size: 10px">1) Writing Skill/Style: Not much to say here. You three are excellent, capable and knowledgeable in the ways of the pen (or keyboard, these days, I suppose). Descriptions are clear and engaging. Characters are rounded, particularly well for a series of short stories, I might add, and believable, sympathetic and horrifying (where they have to be). The writers are bringin' the thunduh to this match. Moments of lightheartedness, unspoken love, friendships, horror, fear, desperation, humor, nostalgia...You guys have covered it all! I really have no idea what I'm gonna do with the three of you...let's see how the rest pans out.</span></p><p><span style="font-size: 10px"></span></p><p><span style="font-size: 10px">2) Picture Use: The pyramid is a setting piece. Each story used it as such as the foreboding site of adventure I had no doubt it would be. It's use as the home of the Oompa Loompas in </span><em>Sticky</em> was a particularly fun touch. But then, the burial tower in <em>Jack</em> was a colorful tidbit to the setting. I do very much wish we would have gotten to see a bit more (interior) of <em>Shard's</em> lich-lord tower. But those deadlines are there for a reason. More on that later. I think there is no edge for this one.</p><p></p><p>The white...ball...glob...things. Loved 'EM! Their use in all three was spot on, creative, and took a completely bizarre "unbelievable" kind of image and made it totally believable! As the knids, the curious scouting spell (which I am TOTALLY stealing to use in game, btw) and, perhaps my favorite, the arguing bound goblin souls which had me just chuckling away. All three were brilliant. Again, no edge, three way tie of AWESOMESAWCE here.</p><p></p><p>The skeleton guy was an interesting addition in both <em>Jack </em>and <em>Sticky </em>(since we did not get around to seeing him in <em>Shards</em>). He is a solid character for both. I think the<em> Gentleman Jack</em> portrayal, as a one-time hero laid under a curse, gives him a bit more depth and, as the hero vs. the villain of Wonka-lich, he becomes completely accepted by the reader...Whereas<em> Sticky's</em> use of him as the eternal Wonka was just steeped in fantastically dark whimsy, and his "skeleton-ness" (?) is not at all lost or forgotten...which I think it does, a bit, in Jack. </p><p></p><p>The red crystal, similar to the towering set-piece, is what it is. A big stone with a red crystal on it. It was used just fine in all three. I think <em>Shard's</em> introduction of it early as a great treasure was well done. The saving crystal needed/sought out by Jack gives it a bit more plot significance in <em>Jack</em>...but we might have seen that in <em>Shards</em> at some later point had we had the pleasure of a completed tale. Its use in <em>Sticky</em> as Wonka's 'phylactery', for lack of a better term, was similarly well done, but did feel a bit forced in there. It has a definite plot purpose...but it feels, I dunno, just shoehorned in, to me. </p><p></p><p>I don't know...I'm still not getting the "this one has an edge" that I was really hoping for, by now.</p><p></p><p>3) Personal Enjoyment: What's to say? These are three great stories. The horror-nostalgia of <em>Sticky's</em> "look into what happened after" the chocolate Factory was just genius. It was, sincerely, "creepy" in all of the fun-yet-horrific ways creepy can be.I thoroughly enjoyed it.<em></em></p><p><em></em></p><p><em>Gentleman Jack</em> gave us the tidbits of what seemed to be a well thought out greater world and a past that entices the reader to desire it explored. The "what happened between Jack and Beth before?" and "what will happen after they get out of this?" are just wonderful questions to make a reader wonder...To really enjoy looking into that snapshot of time of the short story and be interested and excited and wonder about what happened beyond that snapshot. That takes real talent and excellent craft. (which, to be clear, I believe all three of you have.)</p><p></p><p><em>Shards</em> was really really getting my gaming juices flowing. The characters, the friendships, some past experiences that the reader are "let in on", the relationship/exchanges with the transmuted goblins, the subtle detail of the clockwork bird, the description of Cole walking through the bustling streets...there's just an amazing setting here waiting to be played in! It feels "full", for lack of a better term. It's fleshed out and has a depth. As the reader, I want to go explore more of it.</p><p></p><p>I very very much hope, Steel Draco, you will indulge us all and complete the story. It really was off to such a great start. I am terribly sorry that its lack of use of all the images is the biggest minus to scoring, for me. Perhaps even moreso than the story being incomplete.</p><p></p><p>And, if I haven't said it already, I know others have, KUDOS and honorable mention for submitting what you had vs. just "bowing out". I, for one, am very happy that you did. </p><p></p><p>But, at the end of the day, when it's all said and done...I do have to pick just one of you, don't I?...with a pure "personal enjoyment" <em>miniscule</em> hair of preference...</p><p></p><p>Steel Dragons' pick for winner of Round II: Match 2 goes to...</p><p><span style="font-size: 12px"><strong>Daeja</strong></span></p></blockquote><p></p>
[QUOTE="steeldragons, post: 5891901, member: 92511"] [SIZE=2][SIZE=3]Round II: Match 2 [/SIZE] Rodrigo Instalindir’s [I]Revenge is a Dish Best Served Sticky[/I] vs. Daeja’s [I]Untitled...(I'll refer to this as "Jack" for simplicity's sake)[/I] vs. SteelDraco’s [I]Shards out of Bond[/I] Let's to it...shall we? 1) Writing Skill/Style: Not much to say here. You three are excellent, capable and knowledgeable in the ways of the pen (or keyboard, these days, I suppose). Descriptions are clear and engaging. Characters are rounded, particularly well for a series of short stories, I might add, and believable, sympathetic and horrifying (where they have to be). The writers are bringin' the thunduh to this match. Moments of lightheartedness, unspoken love, friendships, horror, fear, desperation, humor, nostalgia...You guys have covered it all! I really have no idea what I'm gonna do with the three of you...let's see how the rest pans out. 2) Picture Use: The pyramid is a setting piece. Each story used it as such as the foreboding site of adventure I had no doubt it would be. It's use as the home of the Oompa Loompas in [/SIZE][I]Sticky[/I] was a particularly fun touch. But then, the burial tower in [I]Jack[/I] was a colorful tidbit to the setting. I do very much wish we would have gotten to see a bit more (interior) of [I]Shard's[/I] lich-lord tower. But those deadlines are there for a reason. More on that later. I think there is no edge for this one. The white...ball...glob...things. Loved 'EM! Their use in all three was spot on, creative, and took a completely bizarre "unbelievable" kind of image and made it totally believable! As the knids, the curious scouting spell (which I am TOTALLY stealing to use in game, btw) and, perhaps my favorite, the arguing bound goblin souls which had me just chuckling away. All three were brilliant. Again, no edge, three way tie of AWESOMESAWCE here. The skeleton guy was an interesting addition in both [I]Jack [/I]and [I]Sticky [/I](since we did not get around to seeing him in [I]Shards[/I]). He is a solid character for both. I think the[I] Gentleman Jack[/I] portrayal, as a one-time hero laid under a curse, gives him a bit more depth and, as the hero vs. the villain of Wonka-lich, he becomes completely accepted by the reader...Whereas[I] Sticky's[/I] use of him as the eternal Wonka was just steeped in fantastically dark whimsy, and his "skeleton-ness" (?) is not at all lost or forgotten...which I think it does, a bit, in Jack. The red crystal, similar to the towering set-piece, is what it is. A big stone with a red crystal on it. It was used just fine in all three. I think [I]Shard's[/I] introduction of it early as a great treasure was well done. The saving crystal needed/sought out by Jack gives it a bit more plot significance in [I]Jack[/I]...but we might have seen that in [I]Shards[/I] at some later point had we had the pleasure of a completed tale. Its use in [I]Sticky[/I] as Wonka's 'phylactery', for lack of a better term, was similarly well done, but did feel a bit forced in there. It has a definite plot purpose...but it feels, I dunno, just shoehorned in, to me. I don't know...I'm still not getting the "this one has an edge" that I was really hoping for, by now. 3) Personal Enjoyment: What's to say? These are three great stories. The horror-nostalgia of [I]Sticky's[/I] "look into what happened after" the chocolate Factory was just genius. It was, sincerely, "creepy" in all of the fun-yet-horrific ways creepy can be.I thoroughly enjoyed it.[I] Gentleman Jack[/I] gave us the tidbits of what seemed to be a well thought out greater world and a past that entices the reader to desire it explored. The "what happened between Jack and Beth before?" and "what will happen after they get out of this?" are just wonderful questions to make a reader wonder...To really enjoy looking into that snapshot of time of the short story and be interested and excited and wonder about what happened beyond that snapshot. That takes real talent and excellent craft. (which, to be clear, I believe all three of you have.) [I]Shards[/I] was really really getting my gaming juices flowing. The characters, the friendships, some past experiences that the reader are "let in on", the relationship/exchanges with the transmuted goblins, the subtle detail of the clockwork bird, the description of Cole walking through the bustling streets...there's just an amazing setting here waiting to be played in! It feels "full", for lack of a better term. It's fleshed out and has a depth. As the reader, I want to go explore more of it. I very very much hope, Steel Draco, you will indulge us all and complete the story. It really was off to such a great start. I am terribly sorry that its lack of use of all the images is the biggest minus to scoring, for me. Perhaps even moreso than the story being incomplete. And, if I haven't said it already, I know others have, KUDOS and honorable mention for submitting what you had vs. just "bowing out". I, for one, am very happy that you did. But, at the end of the day, when it's all said and done...I do have to pick just one of you, don't I?...with a pure "personal enjoyment" [I]miniscule[/I] hair of preference... Steel Dragons' pick for winner of Round II: Match 2 goes to... [SIZE=3][B]Daeja[/B][/SIZE] [/QUOTE]
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