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Message: <blockquote data-quote="yangnome" data-source="post: 2353323" data-attributes="member: 7413">Berandor,[sblock]You brought up a number of astute observations.  I think I pretty much agree with most, if not all of the points you make.  I’ll try to address them one by one to show the reason for my choices.  I agree with this.  I’m not very good at describing combat, especially when dealing with epic level fantasy martial arts stuff.  Throw the wings of the Angel into the equation and I had a full plate in front of me.  I think in trying to describe something cinematic, I slipped out of character.  I began trying to picture the fight in my mind, and I didn’t filter it through the eyes of the narrator. I think I could have avoided this mistake had I been a bit more comfortable with the topic I was writing.Indeed, that would have been a good opening line to the story.  I toyed around with trying a different opening line that introduced conflict a bit sooner, but couldn’t come up with something I liked.  I think your suggestion is nice and simple and would have made a good alternative.These are questions I thought about answering in the story, but decided to leave them unanswered.  Looking back, I think I should have at least answered why he came alone.  Doing so would have helped stress one of the themes behind my story.Of course, some of the questions you ask let me know that I might not have covered this theme enough…or perhaps I did cover it just enough.    This theme was the arrogance of man.  In the telling of the story, it seems as if the angel of death is the evil character, bringing with her the end of the world.  The monk makes a stand for humanity.  In the end however, it is the monk’s arrogance that brings about the end of the world.  His kick brings the fatal blow to the world.  He destroys what he originally set out to save.  Had he not shown, would the world have ended?  Well, I guess that is where destiny comes in.  I guess it is similar to the question, ‘what if no one had crucified Jesus.’As to the question about the hole he put in the earth, it wasn’t this that destroyed the world.  I think I was a bit too subtle with this for the audience to pick it up, but his kick shook the world.  It shook it hard enough that it destroyed the balance and caused it to fall from the web of reality.  This of course, brought about the destruction of the world.</blockquote>

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