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<blockquote data-quote="Herremann the Wise" data-source="post: 2353789" data-attributes="member: 11300"><p>Hi Berandor,</p><p></p><p>Comments within, <img src="data:image/gif;base64,R0lGODlhAQABAIAAAAAAAP///yH5BAEAAAAALAAAAAABAAEAAAIBRAA7" class="smilie smilie--sprite smilie--sprite1" alt=":)" title="Smile :)" loading="lazy" data-shortname=":)" /> </p><p></p><p>[sblock]</p><p></p><p>That's fair comment. My writing is shall we say... indulgent, to a certain extent. It's a style thing and I suppose it isn't to everyone's taste. For me, I love words and putting them together in different ways to elicit different effects. Perhaps even, a lot of it comes from the way I actually write. I see a scene in my head and I play it out as if it's a movie and I'm there with my camera. I block everything out and try and see and feel. Then I write.</p><p></p><p>The following I suppose is an approximate overview of my 72 hours of pleasure and pain.</p><p>Pretty much this whole story was written at work over the space of three 8-hour blocks.</p><p></p><p>The first block was trying to make heads or tails of the pictures - I had something after about three hours but sheesh were there some confidence issues. Even when I had decided a path and trail through the pictures, I questioned myself whether it was good enough. Finding the courage to move forward with it was actually quite difficult for me. I had an outline but I wasn't sure of exactly how to end my tale. Regardless, time was moving past too quick to get lost. I had to start writing.</p><p></p><p>Which by the second block I had. I'd written the introduction, half of the opening and the part with Bazreth and the solar dew spider. However, this was really strange for me. I normally write sequentially with the end product completely written as you see it upon the page. However, I was sought of stuck with exactly how to present the Lorus and Orrolo. Time was flying past all too fast and so I jumped forward to write ahead. I'm glad I did otherwise I really would have run out of time. Anyway, it was the end of the 2nd day and yet there was still so much to write. I really wondered whether I'd have to drop out with tail firmly between my legs.</p><p></p><p>Anyway, on the third day, I really got pumping and finished the final three and a half thousand words. However, the ceiling of 5000 words was so difficult. I suppose it comes back to that famous quote: "I would have written a shorter letter but I did not have time". A quote <em>so</em> true. Anyway, the story was finished so I printed it out like I had every other day to take it home to edit with my trusty red pen. Cleaning up certain phrases, making others a little more accurate and tidy.</p><p></p><p>And so, with the deadline at 8:51am on a chilly Thursday morning in Sydney, I finally posted up my first Ceramic DM entry.</p><p></p><p>Anyway, I suppose I followed the same advice given to my from these boards when I started my Story Hour: write for yourself.</p><p>And so my style is the eventual product. And I love Jack Vance, what can I say. <img src="data:image/gif;base64,R0lGODlhAQABAIAAAAAAAP///yH5BAEAAAAALAAAAAABAAEAAAIBRAA7" class="smilie smilie--sprite smilie--sprite2" alt=";)" title="Wink ;)" loading="lazy" data-shortname=";)" /> </p><p></p><p></p><p>Again fair comment. The limits of telling a long story as a short story I suppose is the key here. In the end, it had to become more a tale that did not get bogged down in such issues.</p><p>Again, the restrictions brought about by following the pictures dominates here.</p><p></p><p>However, I hope there was enough conflict to drive the story, between E'dhanus and Orrolo, E'dhanus and Bazreth and I suppose wondering how it would all turn out - I mean, what was "the gift" anyway. I tried to leave this hanging until the end.</p><p></p><p>I suppose the conflict that I was using to drive the story was a little too subtle; particularly compared to the more standard Ceramic DM entries. Unfortunately, there was simply not the space to go into the more minute details of how or why. In fact, I wanted to keep things somewhat vague in regards to motives.</p><p></p><p>For example, did the Lorus send E'dhanus because she knew that Bazreth would smite him for his arrogance while Orrolo as a beacon of spirit and portent, would blind the wizard with his significance? Was the gift not only the Dragon's Egg, but giving Bazreth back to his people? There is simply not the space to push these things forward so explicitly. With more time, and I suppose a better writer, these issues could be more neatly folded into the story.</p><p></p><p></p><p>If you enjoyed the story, I achieved my aim. <img src="data:image/gif;base64,R0lGODlhAQABAIAAAAAAAP///yH5BAEAAAAALAAAAAABAAEAAAIBRAA7" class="smilie smilie--sprite smilie--sprite1" alt=":)" title="Smile :)" loading="lazy" data-shortname=":)" /> </p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p>I was happy with my use of the pictures overall. I was dead set scared to begin with though. Here's just a little explanation of each one:</p><p></p><p>The Smiling Man</p><p>As you can see, this is Moses with Bazreth in the background holding his staff. Behind them is the massive twin planet of Iriadeus. As I mentioned before, if you look at "Moses", he is looking in awe, but if you then focus upon his eyes, you can see the fear in them. The reflected sunset in his eyes was also a key. He needed to be looking at something magnificent. As such I really tried to capture the natural flow that was inherent in the image - the best I have seen in my opinion from looking through a good selection of past pictures.</p><p></p><p>The Spider's Web</p><p>I really liked this. With several reference's in the story - "our friend's final message" - for eample, I thought I meshed this in pretty well. It was the portent that changed the mind of Bazreth and gave him a reason to trust Orrolo - at least to a certain extent. I thought of using the reflection in the dew drops more and in fact did although you would not easily find it. If you look closely, there appear to be two riders and so, that's how I had the dragons; with two riders - what the web was auguring to Bazreth.</p><p></p><p>Ki Kick</p><p>Obviously, this had the dominant effect once I knew this was E'dhanus. That would mean that he was more oriental, and so I decided to make them part of an Empire to match with that. However, the distortion in the middle of the image seemed important to use. If you had not noticed, I really tried to suck the last drop of marrow out of each picture using them as literally as I could. His expression, seemed one of defiance, pain and surprise so that is how I used it. The distorted line was the vertical plane of magic that would destroy him.</p><p></p><p>The Bridge</p><p>This was the most general image. However, the winter it spoke of set the entire environment for the scenery in the Empire. Combined with the cloudy background of the Ki Kick, it set the weather arrangements - in direct contrast with the summer-like aspect of the Northern Kingdom of the arid wastes. This is why I needed to divorce those images as far apart as possible in terms of space within the three realms. While this was most likely the weakest use of a picture from my perspective, I tried to have this place significant as the "portal" to Bazreth's magical glade and the dramatic scene of E'dhanus's demise and the discovery of Orrolo's link to the portent. I thought, if I can't use this picture that effectively, it might as well be the place where some interesting things happen.</p><p>[By the way, the glade is meant to be magically protected and thus why it is in eternal springtime compared to the surrounding Winter.]</p><p></p><p>Anyway, Berandor, thank you very much for the critique. I will take on board your comments in either the next round or the next Ceramic DM, which ever comes first. <img src="data:image/gif;base64,R0lGODlhAQABAIAAAAAAAP///yH5BAEAAAAALAAAAAABAAEAAAIBRAA7" class="smilie smilie--sprite smilie--sprite1" alt=":)" title="Smile :)" loading="lazy" data-shortname=":)" /></p><p>[/sblock]</p><p></p><p>Best Regards</p><p>Herremann the Wise</p></blockquote><p></p>
[QUOTE="Herremann the Wise, post: 2353789, member: 11300"] Hi Berandor, Comments within, :) [sblock] That's fair comment. My writing is shall we say... indulgent, to a certain extent. It's a style thing and I suppose it isn't to everyone's taste. For me, I love words and putting them together in different ways to elicit different effects. Perhaps even, a lot of it comes from the way I actually write. I see a scene in my head and I play it out as if it's a movie and I'm there with my camera. I block everything out and try and see and feel. Then I write. The following I suppose is an approximate overview of my 72 hours of pleasure and pain. Pretty much this whole story was written at work over the space of three 8-hour blocks. The first block was trying to make heads or tails of the pictures - I had something after about three hours but sheesh were there some confidence issues. Even when I had decided a path and trail through the pictures, I questioned myself whether it was good enough. Finding the courage to move forward with it was actually quite difficult for me. I had an outline but I wasn't sure of exactly how to end my tale. Regardless, time was moving past too quick to get lost. I had to start writing. Which by the second block I had. I'd written the introduction, half of the opening and the part with Bazreth and the solar dew spider. However, this was really strange for me. I normally write sequentially with the end product completely written as you see it upon the page. However, I was sought of stuck with exactly how to present the Lorus and Orrolo. Time was flying past all too fast and so I jumped forward to write ahead. I'm glad I did otherwise I really would have run out of time. Anyway, it was the end of the 2nd day and yet there was still so much to write. I really wondered whether I'd have to drop out with tail firmly between my legs. Anyway, on the third day, I really got pumping and finished the final three and a half thousand words. However, the ceiling of 5000 words was so difficult. I suppose it comes back to that famous quote: "I would have written a shorter letter but I did not have time". A quote [I]so[/I] true. Anyway, the story was finished so I printed it out like I had every other day to take it home to edit with my trusty red pen. Cleaning up certain phrases, making others a little more accurate and tidy. And so, with the deadline at 8:51am on a chilly Thursday morning in Sydney, I finally posted up my first Ceramic DM entry. Anyway, I suppose I followed the same advice given to my from these boards when I started my Story Hour: write for yourself. And so my style is the eventual product. And I love Jack Vance, what can I say. ;) Again fair comment. The limits of telling a long story as a short story I suppose is the key here. In the end, it had to become more a tale that did not get bogged down in such issues. Again, the restrictions brought about by following the pictures dominates here. However, I hope there was enough conflict to drive the story, between E'dhanus and Orrolo, E'dhanus and Bazreth and I suppose wondering how it would all turn out - I mean, what was "the gift" anyway. I tried to leave this hanging until the end. I suppose the conflict that I was using to drive the story was a little too subtle; particularly compared to the more standard Ceramic DM entries. Unfortunately, there was simply not the space to go into the more minute details of how or why. In fact, I wanted to keep things somewhat vague in regards to motives. For example, did the Lorus send E'dhanus because she knew that Bazreth would smite him for his arrogance while Orrolo as a beacon of spirit and portent, would blind the wizard with his significance? Was the gift not only the Dragon's Egg, but giving Bazreth back to his people? There is simply not the space to push these things forward so explicitly. With more time, and I suppose a better writer, these issues could be more neatly folded into the story. If you enjoyed the story, I achieved my aim. :) I was happy with my use of the pictures overall. I was dead set scared to begin with though. Here's just a little explanation of each one: The Smiling Man As you can see, this is Moses with Bazreth in the background holding his staff. Behind them is the massive twin planet of Iriadeus. As I mentioned before, if you look at "Moses", he is looking in awe, but if you then focus upon his eyes, you can see the fear in them. The reflected sunset in his eyes was also a key. He needed to be looking at something magnificent. As such I really tried to capture the natural flow that was inherent in the image - the best I have seen in my opinion from looking through a good selection of past pictures. The Spider's Web I really liked this. With several reference's in the story - "our friend's final message" - for eample, I thought I meshed this in pretty well. It was the portent that changed the mind of Bazreth and gave him a reason to trust Orrolo - at least to a certain extent. I thought of using the reflection in the dew drops more and in fact did although you would not easily find it. If you look closely, there appear to be two riders and so, that's how I had the dragons; with two riders - what the web was auguring to Bazreth. Ki Kick Obviously, this had the dominant effect once I knew this was E'dhanus. That would mean that he was more oriental, and so I decided to make them part of an Empire to match with that. However, the distortion in the middle of the image seemed important to use. If you had not noticed, I really tried to suck the last drop of marrow out of each picture using them as literally as I could. His expression, seemed one of defiance, pain and surprise so that is how I used it. The distorted line was the vertical plane of magic that would destroy him. The Bridge This was the most general image. However, the winter it spoke of set the entire environment for the scenery in the Empire. Combined with the cloudy background of the Ki Kick, it set the weather arrangements - in direct contrast with the summer-like aspect of the Northern Kingdom of the arid wastes. This is why I needed to divorce those images as far apart as possible in terms of space within the three realms. While this was most likely the weakest use of a picture from my perspective, I tried to have this place significant as the "portal" to Bazreth's magical glade and the dramatic scene of E'dhanus's demise and the discovery of Orrolo's link to the portent. I thought, if I can't use this picture that effectively, it might as well be the place where some interesting things happen. [By the way, the glade is meant to be magically protected and thus why it is in eternal springtime compared to the surrounding Winter.] Anyway, Berandor, thank you very much for the critique. I will take on board your comments in either the next round or the next Ceramic DM, which ever comes first. :) [/sblock] Best Regards Herremann the Wise [/QUOTE]
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