Menu
News
All News
Dungeons & Dragons
Level Up: Advanced 5th Edition
Pathfinder
Starfinder
Warhammer
2d20 System
Year Zero Engine
Industry News
Reviews
Dragon Reflections
Columns
Weekly Digests
Weekly News Digest
Freebies, Sales & Bundles
RPG Print News
RPG Crowdfunding News
Game Content
ENterplanetary DimENsions
Mythological Figures
Opinion
Worlds of Design
Peregrine's Next
RPG Evolution
Other Columns
From the Freelancing Frontline
Monster ENcyclopedia
WotC/TSR Alumni Look Back
4 Hours w/RSD (Ryan Dancey)
The Road to 3E (Jonathan Tweet)
Greenwood's Realms (Ed Greenwood)
Drawmij's TSR (Jim Ward)
Community
Forums & Topics
Forum List
Latest Posts
Forum list
*Dungeons & Dragons
Level Up: Advanced 5th Edition
D&D Older Editions
*TTRPGs General
*Pathfinder & Starfinder
EN Publishing
*Geek Talk & Media
Search forums
Chat/Discord
Resources
Wiki
Pages
Latest activity
Media
New media
New comments
Search media
Downloads
Latest reviews
Search resources
EN Publishing
Store
EN5ider
Adventures in ZEITGEIST
Awfully Cheerful Engine
What's OLD is NEW
Judge Dredd & The Worlds Of 2000AD
War of the Burning Sky
Level Up: Advanced 5E
Events & Releases
Upcoming Events
Private Events
Featured Events
Socials!
Twitch
YouTube
Facebook (EN Publishing)
Facebook (EN World)
Twitter
Instagram
TikTok
Podcast
Features
Top 5 RPGs Compiled Charts 2004-Present
Adventure Game Industry Market Research Summary (RPGs) V1.0
Ryan Dancey: Acquiring TSR
Q&A With Gary Gygax
D&D Rules FAQs
TSR, WotC, & Paizo: A Comparative History
D&D Pronunciation Guide
Million Dollar TTRPG Kickstarters
Tabletop RPG Podcast Hall of Fame
Eric Noah's Unofficial D&D 3rd Edition News
D&D in the Mainstream
D&D & RPG History
About Morrus
Log in
Register
What's new
Search
Search
Search titles only
By:
Forums & Topics
Forum List
Latest Posts
Forum list
*Dungeons & Dragons
Level Up: Advanced 5th Edition
D&D Older Editions
*TTRPGs General
*Pathfinder & Starfinder
EN Publishing
*Geek Talk & Media
Search forums
Chat/Discord
Menu
Log in
Register
Install the app
Install
The
VOIDRUNNER'S CODEX
is coming! Explore new worlds, fight oppressive empires, fend off fearsome aliens, and wield deadly psionics with this comprehensive boxed set expansion for 5E and A5E!
Community
General Tabletop Discussion
*TTRPGs General
Ceramic DM - Spring 2005 (Late Bloomer) - We have a winner.
JavaScript is disabled. For a better experience, please enable JavaScript in your browser before proceeding.
You are using an out of date browser. It may not display this or other websites correctly.
You should upgrade or use an
alternative browser
.
Reply to thread
Message
<blockquote data-quote="Berandor" data-source="post: 2357617" data-attributes="member: 225"><p><strong>arwink, Cold Comfort</strong></p><p>[sblock]</p><p>A very "cool" mystery story. Nothing much gets resolved here, neither O'Banion's and Dane's fate nor the nature of the snowmen threat. I have always trouble writing exposition, because it <em>is</em> more natural for people in the know to talk in shorthand: "It's them?" - "Yes." They know what they're talking about - why explain it, and to whom? So while you leave almost everything open, the story flows very well. The characters become clear to us as you show them, not tell us, for example in the way O'Banion drives. </p><p>It's a very accomplished style, I think. I just would have liked to understand some of what was going on behind the scenes. At first, I wasn't satisifed by the ending, but then it felt "right" in that the whole story felt more like a prelude to something big. Thank you, I had fun reading it.</p><p><em>The Pictures</em></p><p>"Fat Jack" is the Prague contact that at first glance is just a drunkard, but then reveals a hint of tragedy in his past. A good use; you made me care for the guy and hope he survived. The "egg sack" is a very nice visual, with something stirring inside. But with a lack of explanation <em>and</em> attacking snowmen, this threat is not as important, nor does it feel very well connected to said snowmen. The "snowmen" themselves, of course, are central to the story. I was surprised to see the previous stories hadn't made them the center of the action, since I think it's a very evocative picture. Well done. On the other hand, the "flying kick", while possibly capoeira, was an interlude I could not connect to the story. Are snowmen slaves and want to break free? Or what is this about? As a result, this use didn't impress me very much.</p><p>[/sblock]</p></blockquote><p></p>
[QUOTE="Berandor, post: 2357617, member: 225"] [b]arwink, Cold Comfort[/b] [sblock] A very "cool" mystery story. Nothing much gets resolved here, neither O'Banion's and Dane's fate nor the nature of the snowmen threat. I have always trouble writing exposition, because it [i]is[/i] more natural for people in the know to talk in shorthand: "It's them?" - "Yes." They know what they're talking about - why explain it, and to whom? So while you leave almost everything open, the story flows very well. The characters become clear to us as you show them, not tell us, for example in the way O'Banion drives. It's a very accomplished style, I think. I just would have liked to understand some of what was going on behind the scenes. At first, I wasn't satisifed by the ending, but then it felt "right" in that the whole story felt more like a prelude to something big. Thank you, I had fun reading it. [i]The Pictures[/i] "Fat Jack" is the Prague contact that at first glance is just a drunkard, but then reveals a hint of tragedy in his past. A good use; you made me care for the guy and hope he survived. The "egg sack" is a very nice visual, with something stirring inside. But with a lack of explanation [i]and[/i] attacking snowmen, this threat is not as important, nor does it feel very well connected to said snowmen. The "snowmen" themselves, of course, are central to the story. I was surprised to see the previous stories hadn't made them the center of the action, since I think it's a very evocative picture. Well done. On the other hand, the "flying kick", while possibly capoeira, was an interlude I could not connect to the story. Are snowmen slaves and want to break free? Or what is this about? As a result, this use didn't impress me very much. [/sblock] [/QUOTE]
Insert quotes…
Verification
Post reply
Community
General Tabletop Discussion
*TTRPGs General
Ceramic DM - Spring 2005 (Late Bloomer) - We have a winner.
Top