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Message: <blockquote data-quote="Piratecat" data-source="post: 3333171" data-attributes="member: 2">Wherein I escaped by the skin of my teeth. Thanks you for setting the bar so high, BSF! My story had some flaws, and I think Berandor highlighted the biggest of them up-thread. The protagonist is actually based on a co-worker of mine who spent his childhood in an extremely conservative church -- or perhaps a cult -- that follows the laws of Deuteronomy. When he told me that his grandparents divorced because of religious differences, and how the church typically excommunicates and shuns anyone who thwarts them, I knew I wanted to include it. I almost posted the "narrator turns evil because of the knowledge of gods" ending, and although I think the story was too pat and simplistic without it, my emotional tenor at the moment is just as happy to lean towards a possibly happy ending.  [for anyone watching the ENnie discussions, it's been a frustrating week for us moderation-wise.] So I had a big plothole in my emotional logic, but I really like some of the story's aspects as well. I tried to use a very different voice and sentence structure than I usually do. I like how chunks of the story are based on fact instead of imagination, although that's not necessarily obvious to other people, and I like some of the frog imagery I was able to create. Orchid Blossom, you filled me with joy when you said you picked that up the second time through -- that had been my hope.  But mostly?  Mostly I love how I felt when I was writing, finally, and four hours disappeared like ten minutes.  I needed that.BSF's story was really interesting. I love the slimy, untrusty narrator. It was an honor to go up against him; thanks!</blockquote>

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