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Message: <blockquote data-quote="carpedavid" data-source="post: 3359788" data-attributes="member: 6971">CommentsComments on all of the stories from this round:[sblock]Piratecat: Just wonderful. I’ve seen the “Christ is alive and well and living in Hoboken” concept before – just not from this angle. Usually, the conspiracy is to keep the messiah safe – not to kill him off, so this was refreshing and really fun. I do, though, agree with Sialia that a stronger personality for the narrator would have helped. That’s really the only fault I could find – I heartily enjoyed it otherwise.Berandor: I like dark and disturbing stories, which yours certainly was. The one fault that I could find is the not-speaking thing. I don’t understand if not speaking actually granted Adam a form of invulnerability, or if that was merely meant to be metaphoric. You were going down a sci-fi angle with the invulnerable body, but then the end felt almost supernatural. I guess I’m not sure which it was supposed to be. While there’s nothing wrong with combining them, the rest of the story suggested that it should be one or the other, and so I was left confused at the end.Mythago: You tell fairy tales like no one else. Even with the obviously limited amount of time you had to put this together, I think it would’ve been a difficult story to beat.My Esteemed Opponent: I was amused by how similarly some of the pictures struck us – particularly the anthropomorphic cat and the shriveled woman who had to use illusions to mask her true nature. I was also delighted to see how we used things differently – I loved the idea of the “face shop.” I nervously await our judgment.Rodrigo: I love the “urban fantasy” genre, and this is a thoroughly entertaining example of it. That’s pretty much it. I liked it <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f642.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":)" title="Smile    :)"  data-smilie="1"data-shortname=":)" />.tadk: Parts of your story had a very spoken-word feel to them, especially the beginning. I could hear the cadence in my head, and I was grooving along. Then, though, it veered into almost-prosaic surrealism, and the voice in my head went quiet. If you could maintain that spoken-word vibe throughout, I think it would be much stronger.[/sblock]</blockquote>

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