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Message: <blockquote data-quote="Gulla" data-source="post: 3382887" data-attributes="member: 4272">Lucky me, I was granted an extra half day off before starting my new job (in 3 hours time) and I get to read the stories and comment  <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f600.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":D" title="Big grin    :D"  data-smilie="8"data-shortname=":D" />  Hopefully I will find time to comment on the finals as well, but currently I looks like that time is around Christmas... (But then again, my calendar always looks full, so I guess I'll find some time).[sblock]Mythago Ok, so you didn't get more than the start done, but could you please finish it sometime? You paint a very interresting triangle of characters, and I would very much like to know how this plays out. I also like what I see of the setting, and would like to see more. Hope you are doing better from the medical stuff.Carpe David Pretty and nice. I have read a lot of farie-tales. Really a lot, and I have grown a bit bored with them after reading nothing but farie-tales for almost a year some time back, so you write something I generally find repetitive this time. The start feels a little bit slow for me. First I thought you simply had a very bad run and wondered what you were doing. That is the background bit. After the real story begins it flows better. I'm not sure the idea of putting the background in the front instead of inserted in between is bad, but it felt very slow to me.The rest of the story flows nicely and is a good tale, with a very Chinese feel. It fits well with my impression from many other Chinese tales, but in that sense it is good that I'm not a judge, since I don't like those tales much. So a bit hard to comment, really, since I feel you do a very good job of writing a Chinese farie-tale (even though the shouting of combat moves feels more like bad Anime or martial arts action movies), but at the same time I don't like the type of story, so to me it is a bit bland.Rodrigo Istalindir. Ouch. And, you have ruined that lovely picture forever. This is really good work. It really is a wonderful horror story. It starts out so calmly and with every sign of a "mushy girly story" and slowly, ever so slowly, the fear creep in. The girl is nicely drawn, and the community is just believeable enough. I really hate (in a good way) the ending of this and it is good for me that it is morning here, and not bedtime. I think the thing you do in this to make it work is "not show, and don't tell". As in all horror what you can almost see is the most disturbing. So: Good Work. If the cat can survive this one as well he is beginning to look  very much a champion, but I'll read his story first, and it better be good.PirateCat (My keyboard insists on naming you PirateCar, today...)  And this one is excellent as well. I like superhero stories better than Chinese Fairie-tales, and this is really nice one that fits very well with the genre. I'm not sure I like the choice of using an introduction, even though this one strikes true. I was reading tings like this under the sheets when I was 12  <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f60e.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":cool:" title="Cool    :cool:"  data-smilie="6"data-shortname=":cool:" /> It still feels like an introduction of the type you get with the old "tales of the unexpected" or early TV horror stories, and I don't like them much. When the story is strong enough you don't need them.The story itself flows nicely. I always liked the different metamorphing superheroes very much, and Rubber Band is a good one. The villain is just as bad as he should be and the powers are used superbly. So: A very good story, and I'm glad I don't have to choose between you and Rodrigo.[/Sblock]So Good luck to all of you, and keep up the good work in the final.Håkonall errors due to little time.</blockquote>

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