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<blockquote data-quote="LordVyreth" data-source="post: 1540476" data-attributes="member: 9626">Yeah, I noticed the extended paragraphs when I looked back on it.&nbsp; I want to keep the story moving forward at a brisk pace, to catch up to current events a little faster, but a few days of revision work might be in order pretty soon.&nbsp; I think I was trying to capture the entirety of a combat round in one paragraph a few times there, but I'll probably break things up further from now on.I'm also interested in any comments people have about the story or game itself, beyond just my writing ability, or lack thereof&nbsp; <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f609.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=";)" title="Wink&nbsp; &nbsp; ;)"&nbsp; data-smilie="2"data-shortname=";)" /> .&nbsp; Any questions on the plot or characters?&nbsp; Input on the battles or monsters, especially my various unique ones?&nbsp; Also, Lela, are you still reading this?&nbsp; I haven't heard from you lately.&nbsp; Did you get a chance to try that elemental cave idea I sent you, or did you need more information still?</blockquote>

[QUOTE="LordVyreth, post: 1540476, member: 9626"] Yeah, I noticed the extended paragraphs when I looked back on it. I want to keep the story moving forward at a brisk pace, to catch up to current events a little faster, but a few days of revision work might be in order pretty soon. I think I was trying to capture the entirety of a combat round in one paragraph a few times there, but I'll probably break things up further from now on. I'm also interested in any comments people have about the story or game itself, beyond just my writing ability, or lack thereof ;) . Any questions on the plot or characters? Input on the battles or monsters, especially my various unique ones? Also, Lela, are you still reading this? I haven't heard from you lately. Did you get a chance to try that elemental cave idea I sent you, or did you need more information still? [/QUOTE]

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