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<blockquote data-quote="Cleon" data-source="post: 8493858" data-attributes="member: 57383">I fiddled around with that sentence a lot, the original version was &quot;acid archers are not venomous and lack a scorpion's sting or a spider's fangs&quot; but the grammar got kludged up when I compacted the sentence.I've changed it to &quot;acid archers do not have venomous fangs or a sting&quot; which is what I was aiming for.I prefer &quot;wild populations&quot; since I was imagining some populations are &quot;fully wild&quot; like, say, a dingo (which may be descended from the domestic dog but is not considered &quot;feral&quot;).Although, that &quot;escaped&quot; start implies recently turned feral, as does the &quot;bred&quot; bit…Better tweak that paragraph.[move to 1st paragraph] Acid archer pedipalps have the same love of darkness and humidity as the amblypygids, uropygids and schizomids they are descended from.Unlike most arachnids, acid archers are social creatures who often hunt in packs. Many drow enclaves keep tame acid-shooting giant vinegaroons as watchbugs and hunting beasts' these are trained to identify drow elves as being other acid archers, so will only attack dark elves they were raised with if the acid archer is so starved it resorts to cannibalism. Wild populations of these giant pedipalps live in the underdark, jungles and tropical forests, descendants of feral acid archers who escaped drow control.</blockquote>

[QUOTE="Cleon, post: 8493858, member: 57383"] I fiddled around with that sentence a lot, the original version was "acid archers are not venomous and lack a scorpion's sting or a spider's fangs" but the grammar got kludged up when I compacted the sentence. I've changed it to "acid archers do not have venomous fangs or a sting" which is what I was aiming for. I prefer "wild populations" since I was imagining some populations are "fully wild" like, say, a dingo (which may be descended from the domestic dog but is not considered "feral"). Although, that "escaped" start implies [I]recently[/I] turned feral, as does the "bred" bit… Better tweak that paragraph. [move to 1st paragraph] Acid archer pedipalps have the same love of darkness and humidity as the amblypygids, uropygids and schizomids they are descended from. Unlike most arachnids, acid archers are social creatures who often hunt in packs. Many drow enclaves keep tame acid-shooting giant vinegaroons as watchbugs and hunting beasts' these are trained to identify drow elves as being other acid archers, so will only attack dark elves they were raised with if the acid archer is so starved it resorts to cannibalism. Wild populations of these giant pedipalps live in the underdark, jungles and tropical forests, descendants of feral acid archers who escaped drow control. [/QUOTE]

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