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<blockquote data-quote="uzirath" data-source="post: 9175853" data-attributes="member: 8495">Spoiler from chapter 8 below. &nbsp;[SPOILER]In the ultimate encounter with the refraction of Ilvaash, the PCs finally get to duke it out with the eldritch horror itself. Fittingly, after exploring a giant brain maze and swimming through six miles of cerebral fluid, the refraction is a big brain. This all works for me so far. And then we get this: &quot;It pulses with alien power as it telepathically intones, 'You have stampeded through my realm like surgeons operating with a hatchet. Your intrusion ends now.'&quot;I get that it's hard to make an enemy truly alien since you want them to have a personality, but this monologue sounds like a two-bit goon. Isn't the surgeons-with-hatchets simile hopelessly grounded in mortal reality? Nothing about it says &quot;I'm a highly intelligent alien god from beyond time and space.&quot;Grumble. I know, I will fix it. It just catapulted me out of my immersion. [/SPOILER]Anyone else stumble over this?</blockquote>

[QUOTE="uzirath, post: 9175853, member: 8495"] Spoiler from chapter 8 below. [SPOILER]In the ultimate encounter with the refraction of Ilvaash, the PCs finally get to duke it out with the eldritch horror itself. Fittingly, after exploring a giant brain maze and swimming through six miles of cerebral fluid, the refraction is a big brain. This all works for me so far. And then we get this: "[I]It pulses with alien power as it telepathically intones, 'You have stampeded through my realm like surgeons operating with a hatchet. Your intrusion ends now.'[/I]" I get that it's hard to make an enemy truly alien since you want them to have a personality, but this monologue sounds like a two-bit goon. Isn't the surgeons-with-hatchets simile hopelessly grounded in mortal reality? Nothing about it says "I'm a highly intelligent alien god from beyond time and space." Grumble. I know, I will fix it. It just catapulted me out of my immersion. [/SPOILER] Anyone else stumble over this? [/QUOTE]

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