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Message: <blockquote data-quote="Rodrigo Istalindir" data-source="post: 4227000" data-attributes="member: 2810">For Dlsharrock:[sblock]Nice story, Dlsharrock.  There's a lot of lines in there I wish I'd written <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f642.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":)" title="Smile    :)"  data-smilie="1"data-shortname=":)" /> (especially "Being blown to bits didn't change much more than the relative location of my limbs.") It can be really hard to pull of that sort of meta-story, but you handled it really well.  The picture use IMO was adequate, but lacked any real ties to the story.  They seemed interchangeable.  In other words, if the picture of the LARPer had been a guy fishing, you could have used it more or less the same way without much difference.  Ideally, the picture and the text intertwine so that neither would work without the other.  Obviously, the entire setup is contrived -- that's the point of CDM -- but the more you mask that, the better.Uusually, you can spot the picture that inspired the story.  Sometimes it's not even the most unusual pic, or the one that features most prominently, but generally you can look at how a picture is used and say 'Aha!  That's what sparked the idea for this story.'  With yours, though, I can't see it -- what was the spark?Good job with the first one, btw.  I really like it when writers take a fairly straightforward picture and stretch it (and conversely, I really like it when a really wierd picture gets used in a mundane manner that makes sense).  [/sblock]</blockquote>

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