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Message: <blockquote data-quote="Rodrigo Istalindir" data-source="post: 4227104" data-attributes="member: 2810">For Piratecat:[sblock]Ok, damned near perfect.  Not a lot to pick at, here.  You keep getting better, and that's kinda scary.  Hopefully Orchid Blossom will bump you off so I won't face a rematch from last year.Technically, this story is a work of art.  The speech pattern of the old Nazi, the descriptions, the setting.  Top notch.  My only quibble is not hearing from the boy; something to give him some personality would have made his eventual fate a little more resonant.  As it is, we're just left with the twist and have to appreciate it rather than feel it.  Partly that may be because I thought the ending was a little predictable, but that's more because I've gotten to know your style, not to mention be the virtual victim of one of your body-snatchers myself.The picture use was good, with the angel sculpture perfect and awe-inspiring.  If I may be so bold (and so foolish as to advise a potential rival), I think that picture use is sometimes the least-strong element of your stories (calling it a weakness would be great exaggeration), but here the supporting pictures play into the centerpiece perfectly and organically.  Nothing felt forced to fit.This may not be quite the story that your modern-day saviour tale was from last year, but it's a superior Ceramic DM entry, I think.  Glad I wasn't up against it.Oh, and if you haven't read 'Declare' by Tim Powers, I command you to go forth and get it.  You will thank me.[/sblock]</blockquote>

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