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Message: <blockquote data-quote="Herremann the Wise" data-source="post: 4288491" data-attributes="member: 11300">Round Three Berandor vs. DlsharrockARWINK’S JUDGMENTBerandor / DenialI liked Berandor’s set-up, particularly the opening scenes; he sets up the situation and the characters fast and keeps things moving at a fair clip. There were occasional oddities (Who goes and sees Dolly Parton *the day after* their wedding? Would we have lost anything if it’d been a week? A month?) to the characters which didn’t quite fit with the image I was getting, nor did they truly suit the ending we were given.  I think the ending proved to be the biggest weakness here – it’s the conclusion to a different story, not the one you’ve been telling me thus far. There was a realness to the lives of the characters in the introduction that’s absence in the idealized love-conquers-all conclusion. Disharrock / HarbingerI’m a fan of big, bombastic narrative voices and the effect they can generate, but once I peeled that away from this story I found myself wondering what I was getting. Most of the time I’m adrift – this is a quick-fire montage that doesn’t give me time to really process and ground myself in the story, nor does it give me a character that I can hold onto for longer than a few seconds. In many respects it feels like it’s stalling for time until the story catches up to the voice, as it does towards the end. Could have been stronger if it was given more time, particularly the time to edit and even-out the overall effect. JudgmentThe round goes to Berandor without question in my eyes, as he has the stronger story overall. THE JUDGMENT OF HERREMANN THE WISEThe images this time were the classic case of the odd one out. Our two competitors however have taken different paths in their telling – Berandor the straight forward and Dlsharrock the referential.Berandor’s tale is well executed although the final stages seemed a little loose. Berandor was able to convey the emotions of Pam exceedingly well but there was a certain lack of... something that clouded the ending for me. Still there was enough here that I congratulate you on weaving the images together as well as you did.Dlsharrock has written a piece that is nothing short of an extravaganza of imagery and language. I adored the style, daring as it is in a semi-final. I really had to work at this piece to try and ferret out the various references to the images provided – an enjoyable task but a task none the less.The image flashes here and there however force me to once again ponder how well Dlsharrock has dealt with the pictures provided and their necessity to the prophecy given. Unfortunately, I’m left feeling that once again, an image is used but then dismissed equally as quickly, the only one having true resonance being the lady photo/tattoo. However, this is not enough to drive the piece alone and as such, I think what would have been a draw has turned ever so slightly in Berandor’s favour.In all honesty though, I don’t think I have debated in my mind so much on a match since tadk versus Rodrigo I think several competitions back. On the one hand I feel like I am taking the easier path giving my vote to Berandor but on the other, I feel like Dlsharrock has left me with little choice. Berandor gets my vote but congratulations to Dlsharrock for providing something different, challenging and so incredibly vivid.MALDUR’S JUDGMENTBerandor: this story read weirdly, it all felt a bit ...fabricated, it missed a certain flow.dlsharrock: ok, I find it very well done. I wouldnt be able to do it, but I find "ye olde english" completely unreadable <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f609.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=";)" title="Wink    ;)"  data-smilie="2"data-shortname=";)" />Judgement: you guys made it hard, it is unreadable vs a lesser story. But in the end I will go for dlsharrock for I found it way more impressively writtenGood luck for the finalists!FINAL JUDGMENTBerandor sneaks through 2-1. As I write this, I ponder whether I should have called my vote a draw, allowing an unprecedented three into the final? A very close thing in my mind at least - congratulations to both our competitors.</blockquote>

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