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<blockquote data-quote="Cevalic" data-source="post: 3652353" data-attributes="member: 171">Congrats to FickleGM.&nbsp; Best of luck in the next round.Thanks to the judges for the critiques, and for their time that they have volunteered for this competition.A couple answers to some questions I've noticed.&nbsp; The difference between the Risen and Returning is something that I did an awful job of clarrifying in the story.&nbsp; As I wrote it, I had Returning to be where a wizard of Demmun could take the soul of a possessed person back from a demon and replace it in the body.&nbsp; At that point the person who was returned would die, but their soul would at least go to heaven.&nbsp; In the ancient times, the wizards could actually bring the soul back, and then cause the body to Rise, giving them life (although in an otherworldy form).&nbsp; The point of having her in the story would be to show the wizard of the story that the legends are true.&nbsp; That the gods servants are losing their powers.&nbsp; The demon of Vanity is also a symbol of this, as he (the wizard) can defeat the physical demon (Gaia) which he goes after in the end of the story), but showing that the certain demons have powers that are just beyond him.&nbsp; This didn't used to be the case in ancient times, but I realize that I did a very poor job at showing that.&nbsp; All in all, I agree with most of the critiques and see where I could have done better.&nbsp; To me, it seems that the story just seems to set up a larger one, almost like a prologue.&nbsp; Obviously that can't make for a great short story which needs to be contained.Congrats again to FickleGM and the other winners.&nbsp; I'm looking forward to reading the rest of the stories in the final rounds.</blockquote>

[QUOTE="Cevalic, post: 3652353, member: 171"] Congrats to FickleGM. Best of luck in the next round. Thanks to the judges for the critiques, and for their time that they have volunteered for this competition. A couple answers to some questions I've noticed. The difference between the Risen and Returning is something that I did an awful job of clarrifying in the story. As I wrote it, I had Returning to be where a wizard of Demmun could take the soul of a possessed person back from a demon and replace it in the body. At that point the person who was returned would die, but their soul would at least go to heaven. In the ancient times, the wizards could actually bring the soul back, and then cause the body to Rise, giving them life (although in an otherworldy form). The point of having her in the story would be to show the wizard of the story that the legends are true. That the gods servants are losing their powers. The demon of Vanity is also a symbol of this, as he (the wizard) can defeat the physical demon (Gaia) which he goes after in the end of the story), but showing that the certain demons have powers that are just beyond him. This didn't used to be the case in ancient times, but I realize that I did a very poor job at showing that. All in all, I agree with most of the critiques and see where I could have done better. To me, it seems that the story just seems to set up a larger one, almost like a prologue. Obviously that can't make for a great short story which needs to be contained. Congrats again to FickleGM and the other winners. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of the stories in the final rounds. [/QUOTE]

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