Upgrade your account to a Community Supporter account and remove most of the site ads.

Reply to thread

Message: <blockquote data-quote="DEFCON 1" data-source="post: 2129900" data-attributes="member: 7006">Okay Bobitron.. you're up!  <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f642.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":)" title="Smile    :)"  data-smilie="1"data-shortname=":)" />I think Elz can easily fit in to the group, and don't feel it's a lame/overdone concept at all.  The one thing I will say is that she probably could have more details worked into history.  You gave a brife overview of her career, but didn't go into a whole lot of depth on any particular thing.  My advice is to find that one "hook" of the character, and everything will start becoming clearer and clearer and more details will easily be able to be fleshed out.  This usually can come out of the selection of the hubris of the character, because the main character flaw can/will color everything that the character has done and gone through in it's life.Like for instance as I said above, Jason's hook is that he left home because he had problems with his family and was inherently jealous of other people.  Everything he's done since then can either be about avoiding being close to people (the travelling aspect), or going somewhere where he didn't have to worry about those feelings (the monestary aspect).  And for Carl... with his hook of "wanting to be a spy above all else", everything he's done has put him on that path.So I'd say the first step is to figure out Elz's "hook". What's her raison d'etre?  Her "reason for existance"?  Her father was a diplomat in the communist regime and got ousted... how did that affect her?  What was her reasoning for joining the Polish military?  If she was Rash (just selecting that hubris for the sake of argument here) did she do it just on a whim?  Because her father was not around to control her, was she a wildchild... just doing whatever she wanted, whenever she wanted, without thinking of the consequences?  Did the Polish government and GROM have a hard time controlling her?  What problems has she run into?Or if you go with Righteous... perhaps seeing her father lose his job instilled in her the belief that you never know what is going to happen... so you do whatever it takes to make sure you succeed?  Even if that means doing things not-so-by-the-book?  Did the changeover from Poland being a Communist to a non-Communist nation change her outlook on life... seeing her father's world crumble around him?  Was she happy or upset about the change?  If she realizes that change is a part of life... did she join the military in hopes of bringing about change in other areas?  Does she fight for change and use any methods necessary to bring about them?  Or is she hoping to return things to what used to be the status quo, and does whatever she feels is needed to have that happen?Those are just some ideas you can think about as you fill in the details.  I won't go into your specialties, because none of them really stood out as having more importance to her than the others... since they all were things Elz had acquired through her normal time in her career... but nothing that she really excelled in or was interested in.  So I think in your case... once you figure out her hook and the direction that leads her... specialities will come out of it.Any questions, feel free to ask... and we'll hammer things home!  Thanx Bobitron!</blockquote>

Verification