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Message: <blockquote data-quote="Sparky" data-source="post: 1873926" data-attributes="member: 13681">Sam-I-Am from Green Eggs and Ham. An excellent story worth finding and reading. Detective Sam's last lines were inspired by certain passages of Green Eggs and Ham.Tell me about it.  <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f642.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":)" title="Smile    :)"  data-smilie="1"data-shortname=":)" /> You all should (never) see the ones that didn't make the cut. The rhymes were definitely the hardest part of this story. Some of them came in fits and starts over the course of the 72 hours. And I would write them as they came. The rhyme you picked out as working well came altogether in a very short span just as I needed it. Weird how that works.I, like Firelance, used a familiar structure to frame my story. Law & Order. The first half anyway. For those unfamiliar with the show, it's an hour long divided into two halves. In the first half (which I modeled my story on) police investigate a crime. In the second half, lawyers hash out the criminal charges in court. Plain vanilla Law & Order is one of my favorite shows. You only see the successful leads, so that they can pare down a long investigation into the interesting/important bits.Mistakes. Definitely something I tried to look out for and just missed. A lot. Because the Old Woman Who Lived in a Shoe blew all the money on meaningless frippery. Like remodeling the house. She 'had so many children, she didn't know what to do,' is how the verse goes. The verse doesn't paint a favorable picture of her. She's abusive and mistreats the children.Uh... hmmm... gravity? I rationalized that the drag from the braid going up over and behind the house and then feeding into the captain's hands horizontally would be more than sufficient to keep the braid from slipping. And - hey! You don't think (content) looks like a golden-gogo-dancer-Goldfinger-reject (pullover)? Come on!Thanks. It was fun to write. Actually fun. A new experience for me with CDM. Usually I'm just a ball of adrenaline and nerves and caffeine. And I have to give credit for the last line to my husband. He's marvelous with rhymes and puns and this was just one of many (some quite funny, but inappropriate) he entertained me with while I wrote.Law & Order, mythago. It's Law & Order. <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f642.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":)" title="Smile    :)"  data-smilie="1"data-shortname=":)" />Good catch on the catch. Really, all you guys have gotten a lot of the little details, not that they are especially hidden... but still - Good on ya! Yeah, I knew the risks of rhyme. Especially up against Seuss. It was a feeble tribute and I decided it would be fun to even try it. I had fun, and offer sincere apologies for the rhymes that flopped. <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f642.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":)" title="Smile    :)"  data-smilie="1"data-shortname=":)" />  Oh... Rapunzel wasn't a rhymer, I didn't explain it, but she picked up the rhymes off of Sam. The bond between partners, ya know? Though why she picked it up right off... not too sure. Rapunzel was supposed to come across as irritated with the rhyming and, convenient for my hasty rhymes, not so good at it. The Captain can't actually pose. That's the shape she got frozen in when Midas touched her. Imagine her reaching out to touch Midas. Forgot this little detail.About Rapunzel's partner? Sam's new to the precinct. I'd hoped to point that out more, he didn't know what was up with the captain and all that sort of thing.--------To Firelance: Crush Macbeth. Leave no traces. Erm... I mean good luck, both of you.I really enjoyed Cinders and Gnomish Word for Word. I felt it would be close and you had me worried - with good reason. Can't wait to see what you come up with next.Oh! I can hear the opening theme of Law & Order downstairs (where my husband is busy cooking for Thanksgiving - isn't he sweet?) so I'm going to tie off this long-winded ramble and head downstairs to pitch in (and watch my show).Thanks again to judges, organizers and writers. This was great fun! I'll get past round 2 one of these days.</blockquote>

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