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Message: <blockquote data-quote="enbee75" data-source="post: 7138371" data-attributes="member: 6882940">Hi folks,Have written out an adventure set up as kind of a grim murder mystery and wanted to know what you all might think and how I could improve it. This'll be my first time going off-module so to speak, so want it to go well!Background - 5 PCs just opened a detective agency in Sharn (in a cheap part of town) - their first jobScene 1 - Human local resident describes killing in residential district last night - two bodies - one which has been split open vertically, and another who has been slashed/clawed to death. The community have had problems with the city watch so decided to find inquisitors up to the job using community money.Scene 2 - Scene of the murder. Original NPC names them as brothers. <ul> <li data-xf-list-type="ul">Clue 1 - serated cuts on body</li> <li data-xf-list-type="ul">Clue 2 - Putrid smell - filthy</li> <li data-xf-list-type="ul">Clue 3 - One victim armed with sword, the other unarmed. One brother is holding a long brown whip-like material.</li> </ul>Scene 3 - talking to Witnesses/family of victims<ul> <li data-xf-list-type="ul">Clue 1 - Eyes of one of the brothers changed to black over a month ago, has recently been disappearing at night - smelling terrible</li> <li data-xf-list-type="ul">Clue 2 - One morning, his sheets were found to be bloodied. He didn't speak a word and disappeared for 3 weeks, only recently returning.</li> <li data-xf-list-type="ul">Clue 3 - The other brother was angry at him and decided to confront him - and set out armed with a sword.</li> </ul>Scene 4 - Encounter with Giant Cockroach at night (where ever PCs end up) with one antennae missingScene 5 - Tower trash disposal room at night (roaches have light sensitivity) - Encounter with 3 Roach Thralls - human figures which have Giant Cockroaches burst out of them when threatened and attack PCs.Community rewards heroes with a bit of cash and some items!I was wondering if maybe this is a bit simplistic, even though it's a first level adventure. Do you think it might need a bit more of a twist/extra encounter? I'm also a bit concerned with the clues not being picked up on and leading the PCs in the right direction - heading to the trash disposal might be a bit of a leap.Maybe adding someone with a motive who's able to control these roaches?Thanks for any advice!</blockquote>

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