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<blockquote data-quote="mythusmage" data-source="post: 151686" data-attributes="member: 571"><p>Actually, reading through it again, I think I was having an episode of something or other again.</p><p></p><p>It's making sense now.<img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f642.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":)" title="Smile :)" data-smilie="1"data-shortname=":)" /></p><p></p><p>(I don't drink. I don't indulge in recreational pharmacuticals. I hate not having a convenient excuse.<img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f600.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":D" title="Big grin :D" data-smilie="8"data-shortname=":D" />)</p><p></p><p>You do have a habit of writing meandering sentences. I know this because, being the creative type that I am -one who tends to write in a "stream of conciousness" style, and who forgets to go back and organize said thoughts, much to the confusion of the reader- I do it myself.</p><p></p><p>Go through the original manuscript and where you see a sentence with one or more commas try rewording it as two or more sentences. Will likely mean a longer manuscript, but one that's easier to read.</p><p></p><p>Now for a formatting nit. I like the borders. I'm sure that if I had a professional printer they'd look better yet. But (another of those horrid "buts"<img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f642.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":)" title="Smile :)" data-smilie="1"data-shortname=":)" />), on the inside pages they really need to be on the outside margins instead of the inside margin. As it is they'd get hidden should one get the booklet bound.</p><p></p><p>BTW, if you like, you can send me the text file via email and I'll send back my editing hack for your review.</p><p></p><p>(My mom drilled into my thick skull that when you're in the right you stand up for yourself. When you're in the wrong, you fess up, make up, and get on with life.)</p></blockquote><p></p>
[QUOTE="mythusmage, post: 151686, member: 571"] Actually, reading through it again, I think I was having an episode of something or other again. It's making sense now.:) (I don't drink. I don't indulge in recreational pharmacuticals. I hate not having a convenient excuse.:D) You do have a habit of writing meandering sentences. I know this because, being the creative type that I am -one who tends to write in a "stream of conciousness" style, and who forgets to go back and organize said thoughts, much to the confusion of the reader- I do it myself. Go through the original manuscript and where you see a sentence with one or more commas try rewording it as two or more sentences. Will likely mean a longer manuscript, but one that's easier to read. Now for a formatting nit. I like the borders. I'm sure that if I had a professional printer they'd look better yet. But (another of those horrid "buts":)), on the inside pages they really need to be on the outside margins instead of the inside margin. As it is they'd get hidden should one get the booklet bound. BTW, if you like, you can send me the text file via email and I'll send back my editing hack for your review. (My mom drilled into my thick skull that when you're in the right you stand up for yourself. When you're in the wrong, you fess up, make up, and get on with life.) [/QUOTE]
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