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Message: <blockquote data-quote="Tuzenbach" data-source="post: 1490077" data-attributes="member: 16155">You've made two mistakes so far:1. Establishing a website geared towards the distribution of either free product or product for sale......WITH NO PRODUCT!!! What you SHOULD HAVE done (I know, hindsight is 20/20) would have been to launch the website and the product(s) SIMULTANEOULSY. As it stands, you have a website that potential consumers have already passed judgement on. What'll bring them back, pleasant emails? A good way to lose customers is to make them wait, i.e., "Look what I've got! Oh, but it won't be ready for another eight weeks. Sorry!" Would you like it if someone did that to you?2. Product description: OK, I've been reading the bulk of this thread for the past hour and you're quite a communicative and thorough writer. Why the hell is it, then, that you've put the word "sky" twice in the opening (the most important) sentence?!?! Again, as a consumer, I'd be driven to your competition based soley upon the first sentence of your first product's description. Did I even bother to read the following sentences? WOULD YOU HAVE? Rewrite the first sentence and replace the first "sky" with "heavens" or "stars" or "celestial bodies" or similar lore. DO IT! Then (and ONLY THEN!) will I be able to read the following sentences.</blockquote>