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Message: <blockquote data-quote="Cheiromancer" data-source="post: 2278415" data-attributes="member: 141">Lots of cool things! OK, start with nit-picks:  How about simply "She gains the ability to prepare and cast one first-level spell from the cleric list." Later on you can write "This path may be taken up to 9 times, each time granting a spell one level higher." This avoids a vague referent and simplifies the wording. You have to adjust the wording of the Domain Mystic Power. If the mystic is on the priest path she automatically can cast spells, and does not need to take the magical talent mystic power. In fact, magical talent is no longer on the mystic powers list. Instead of   say that "The domain spells can be selected as if they were on the cleric list."  This sentence no verb. <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f609.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=";)" title="Wink    ;)"  data-smilie="2"data-shortname=";)" /> And I notice that a fighter5/mystic 5 can cast a 5th level spell if she devotes all her mystic power slots to the task. Is this intentional?  A few words would let you avoid cross-referencing the ELH: Walk on Water (Su): A mystic gains a +60 competence bonus on Balance checks to walk on surfaces that couldn't support the character's weight, such as water or fragile branches (DC 90) or even clouds (DC 120). A mystic must select fast movement at least twice to choose this ability. Mind you, I'd probably make the bonus +40 or +30, and allow fast movement to add to the bonus. I am uncomfortable with the wording "requires and replaces" in Improved Empty Body. Read literally, it suggests that a character who takes it no longer meets the pre-requisites. A pedantic nit-pick, but how about this wording: Improved Empty Body (Su): The duration of the mystic's Empty Body ability increases to 1 minute per mystic level per day. I would leave off the *. It is 10 times the duration of empty body, and 20 minutes a day should be plenty. Some other comments: I like your compromise on multiclassing. It retains the flavor of monkly discipline, but allows exceptions. I like the improvement to abundant step. Camaraderie is also a nice boost to the empath path. Lawgiver is a good continuance to the lawful ki strike ability. Skill mastery is a good idea, too, since mystics will often have skills they need to be able to use reliably. I am not sure about Focused Mind, though. On the one hand, it is very powerful, more powerful IMHO than Slippery Mind. On the other hand, it works only once per day, and can be triggered (and wasted) by a trivial spell or effect. I think it is simultaneously too strong and too weak, and so I would recommend replacing it with Slippery Mind. If you adjust it so that the mystic can use it in response to a strong attack (before rolling, but after learning what the target DC is), then you could keep it in a weaker form. (Make the bonus equal to the class level, say.) And I think you should just make diamond soul the 12th level ability. It fits well with still mind/purity of body/timeless body, is about the right power level for a 12th level ability (it comes at 13th level for a standard monk), and is something that, for all we know, Li Mu Bai and Pai Mei both had. If people want more paths, they can take one at any level. Got to go... I think this is everything, but I might comment more later.</blockquote>

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