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Message: <blockquote data-quote="William Ronald" data-source="post: 1075178" data-attributes="member: 426">Edena, Kalanyr:My schedule will get a bit busier soon, however I might be able to help with proofreading, editing, and in a few other ways.  Since this will not be expanded into a novel, but summarized there are a few things that I can see to make each IR more manageable in story form.First, I noticed there were several commentators in the 1st IR.  While they were part of it, there actions did not seem to directly impact the story very often.  When there was an impact to events, such as the sudden revival of what would later be the Technocracy, it can be summarized.Secondly, it might be possible to cut out parts of the story and out of character reactions.  The rules posts in the 3rd IR can be eliminated for story telling purposes.It might be wise to break the stories into manageable units.  For example, one story for the 1st IR, or maybe break it up into certain events.  (Before and after the Karsus Avatar spell was cast is one division.)  Similarly, the 2nd IR can be broken up between the Trial of the Chosen and the WAR FOR TORIL, when former enemies stood back to back.The 3rd IR could be divided into stories based on each turn, starting with Turn 0.Edena, I sent you an e-mail with some suggestions.  Tell me what you think of them.</blockquote>