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Message: <blockquote data-quote="humble minion" data-source="post: 4970181" data-attributes="member: 5948">Really like the set of ingredients for round 7.  Very nice.Regarding mine...[sblock]I really hope the judgement goes up soon, because every time I look at my entry I get more dissatisfied!I probably should have tried to find some more time for editing.  I dunno if I could have cut the size down all that much, but there's a few bits and pieces that have minor logical holes as written and I could close them up with a sentence or two.  Plus it's more than a bit disorganised in places - the stuff about Girael targeting Merbenna should have been in the description of the performance, for instance, and there were a few other structural issues like this.  And a few less parentheses would probably be a worthy goal to aim at as well...Critical hits is by far my weakest ingredient - Thasmodious did much more with it than me, but I hamstrung myself by using a largely non-combat plot when one of the ingredients was inherently combat-related.  We both made the elf-tree-fruit connection.  Both of our mayors could have been more mayoral - here's one place i'd like to go back and add another sentence or two.  I really like Thas's stellar pathway (particularly in light of the nature of the 4e Far Realm), but I reckon mine was ok.  I may be biased, but I preferred my puppet though!  Could go either way I think.  Thasmodious's scope and nicely done Far-Realm-corrupted-lost-city vibe vs my attempt at a smaller, immersive plot with memorable NPCs and the best Rat Bastardliness I could come up in the make-a-divination-proof-mystery stakes.   Win or lose, I'm not going to do a mystery-type submission like this if I can avoid it in future (whether it be next round or next competition).  Having to detail all the little clues etc in useful detail really bloated the word count ridiculously, and I'd expect to lose based on that alone if Thas hadn't come up with something almost as long.[/sblock]</blockquote>

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