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Message: <blockquote data-quote="Wicht" data-source="post: 5640111" data-attributes="member: 221">For some reason, I am having great difficulty in getting this judgment done. Within a busy schedule I have had word processing crashes (but only when typing this judgment), two unexpected funerals (the second of which is in about two hours from now) and now ENWorld is really glitchy for me. I shall submit this and hope it goes through. [sblock]Both entries are good, some of the better I think we have seen this contest, but one stands out to me as a clear winner, in both creativity and ingredient use. Both followed the rules, so no advantage there.In Ingredient use, again with a possible 2 points for each ingredient (1 for using it and another 1 for using it in what I consider an excellent manner) I graded as follows:Swingset: Neither entry really moved me here and both get the single point. I do think the use in Expiation to be much stronger but it did not seem all that integral to the adventure.Four and Twenty Blackbirds: Expiation receives two points for the use of the blackbirds, Consequences of Court just one. The pie was too easy and it could have, honestly, been any sort of pie and served the same purpose.Raksasha Prince: Again Expiation gets two points and Consequences one point. I like the celestial use of the Raksasha, playing up the spiritual aspect of the monster. The prince in Consequences just seemed like to much of a side villain who does not really enter into the adventure. His army yes, himself, not so much. Field of Stars: Both entries receive only a single point here. I thought the dress was weak and the fact of the astral field of stars was not really played up much in the adventure description itself, and if not for the ingredient list I might have missed the point. Prayer Beads: Consequences again suffers in my mind, from using the prayer beads in a way in which just about anything else could have worked just as easily. Making the construction of the prayer beads strand the basis for the adventure in Expiation works well. 2 points Expiation. 1 Point ConsequencesConsequences: Here I thought both entries did a good job of incorporating the element. 2 Points each.As far as useability, I thought both were about equal. “Expiation” suffers from a couple of problems. It lacks a cohesive middle, with the hells not being properly and succintly described. I would have preferred a brief sentence detailing each hell and the challenge therein. I am not too worried about the specific cosmological theme of the entry, being more concerned the events would either be long and drawn out, losing punch, or, once solved, be over too easy. I give it a 3 out of 6 here. “Consequences” is more traditional and probably more portable, with its multiple hooks.  I do question the feasibility of some of the plot (why would the nobleman even think to  promise a dress belonging to the queen?) but I think it feasible to work things out using the plot given. So 5 out of 6 for Consequences.  In Style, I have to give the edge to “Expiation.” Its a creative piece of work and I think would make a very memorable death 1 on 1 scenario. I hesitate to give it a full 6 out of 6 because I think it could have been better presented so as to include more meat in the hells. Style wise, “Consequences” could have been better presented, I think. Everything's there, but I just don't completely buy into the scenario. I'm giving 4 out of 6 for Style in “Consequences.” Expiation is the winner in my estimation. The points are close, and both entries were good, but the ingredient use in Expiation was excellent and I really like the chance taken on presenting a different sort of scenario. In this case, I think it works, style wise, though it could be better arranged as far as useability.“Expiation”Followed the Rules:    6/6Ingredient Use:    10/12Useability:        3/6Style:            5/6Total:            24/30“Consequences of Court”Followed the Rules:    6/6Ingredient Use:    7/12Useability:        5/6Style:            4/6Total:            22/30[/sblock]</blockquote>

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