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Message: <blockquote data-quote="Lwaxy" data-source="post: 6930481" data-attributes="member: 53286">Not as detailed as I'd have liked, but my head has some orc misusing it as war drums. RulesBoth well within, no advantage. Use of IngredientsAncient CurseThe Hulk has a mother's loss and a murdered girl's fury, while With Strange Aeons  has a spurned necromancer's curse. In both cases, the incident is only a  century old, so not quite that ancient in either case. Other than that,  it was well implemented. No advantage. Moonlight SerenadeA psychic ritual in The Hulk, while the serenade in With Strange Aeons  is a real serenade to lure the girls out at night. The latter feels a  bit forced just to have it included and it makes me wonder why no one  else made a connection from the disappearance of the girls to a nightly  romeo singing in the streets. Not like only the target could hear the  music. So I'm going with the ritual here, despite it not being a  serenade, technically. Advantage The Hulk. Hate StorySo the people in the city of With Strange Aeons  have this problem with disappearing noble girls since a hundred years,  and only now they begin to revolt? Wouldn't nobles faced with this  problem either bring their daughters to other holdings far from the  city, post a constant watch with the girls and get rid of the king as  soon as they could? It also seems more of a fear or revenge thing, not  hate, as everyone is aware of the curse and the only thing they could  hate the king for is for him not to name a new king and leave. The Hulk  on the other hand has a tribe stuck with hate for something that's  happened long ago, yet it makes sense as in a psionic society, such  things likely make a much bigger imprint. Advantage The HulkSanctioned KidnappingsA sanctioned kidnapping,  to me,is where the government or an organization turns a blind eye or is  clearly in favor without being involved. But here we have two cases  where the government and the corporation are directly behind it. No  advantage. Dirty LaundryThe Hulk refers to the  obvious, with the kidnappings and experiments being the figurative dirty  laundry.  Not much of a twist, we could see that coming from the  beginning. With Strange Aeons on the other hand refers to  actual dirty laundry. I really liked that. It was relevant enough to the  plot, too, with the bad guy mistaking the laundry girl for her  employer. Advantage With Strange Aeons.Awakened BehemothWith Strange Aeons has the standard Cthulhuesque beast at the bottom of the sea, which might, or might not, awaken. The Hulk  on the other hand has a psionic problem which, come to think of it,  never really slept all this time, at least not constantly. Yet, it is at  least definitely awake, which isn't the case in With Strange Aeons. Advantage The Hulk. Unstable CargoI liked both the psionic creation  and the mentally unwell girls in the boat for originality, however,  considering the coolness of the psionic effect it's a clear call.  Advantage The Hulk. Sail of Stars Standard solar sail for The Hulk. The sail from the boat in With Strange Aeons is way cooler. Advantage With Strange Aeons. ReadabilityThe  Hulk comes over half finished in editing. It is difficult to quickly  find references as there is a lack of headers etc. It works because it  is not that long a text, but still. With Strange Aeons is very clearly  structured and it is not hard at all to know what's where and find it  immediately. Advantage With Strange Aeons. Use in gameplayThe Hulk  depends on the players finding out a few things in the first part of  the adventure without which they would have a really hard time in the  second part. The GM can easily arrange for it to happen, though, if just  by having the group rescue a native to befriend. Also, if they are  worth their salt, they have done preliminary research and probably  already know that another ship from Revori went missing a 100 years ago.  In the ship itself, there are a few half explained issues, like  what exactly happened on the bridge? The GM will have an easy enough  time to connect all that went wrong with psionic attacks, yet such  things make the adventure appear a bit unfinished. This could also use a  map, which was of course not within the scope of this contest. The ship  layout is, however, described well enough to create a simple map - or  just take another one and ignore the layout provided altogether if you  work with maps. The geonee scavenger is but an afterthought, I  had hoped after the race claiming to be the Ancients was mentioned,  there would be a bit more relevance, but in the end it was just one of  several scavengers. Flower power (hehe) disturbing the ship  really gives a lot of opportunities, not only to quell her anger (as the  group would definitely have recordings of the moonlight ritual) but to  bring her and the mother peace - and what about all the other children?  They aren't mentioned anymore, as they were weaker than Flower, but one  should think their spirits, too, would run along with Flower to cause  mayhem, or at least be there somewhere lost and confused, probably  projecting their fear onto the crew. In my game, I'd definitely rule  that the only way to really free the ship of the haunts was to pacify  all the lost souls. With Strange Aeons has a lot of  background information players may never find out about. I mentioned  somewhere before that this is a pet peeve of mine. Either give them  plenty of option to figure out the details - not just the basic story of  the curse - or reduce background to the absolute must for the GM to  fill in as needed. The plot itself is slightly confusing. Why  are the PCs doing what, again? Depending on the lead used it could go  any which way, which makes this a bit of a sandbox, which is cool  enough. However, as timing seems important, it will, with most groups,  not be that easy to steer them towards the harbor in time - or you have  the opposite effect and there are too many opportunities and the PCs  don't find the road at all. The adventure seems like 2 stories entangled  somehow, and it doesn't fit all that well. There is the beast at the  bottom of the sea, which might never even appear, and then there is the  bad guy killing noble girls to prolong his life, and the only reason why  he needs nobles is that their blood has more vitality (which I don't  find convincing). With less backstory and more adventure, this could  have been a lot better. Advantage The HulkWould my players have fun with it?Definite YES to The Hulk.  It's just the kind of research and recovery which makes the right mix  for the people I GM for. With Strange Aeons, I am pretty sure I would  have to rewrite it into half an adventure path to make it playable for  them (and to be sure the beast appears). Advantage The HulkSo with a clear lead, The Hulk is the winner for me.</blockquote>

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